The Bridesmaid’s Diary

"Hii!😆 Firstly, just wanna say a job well done in producing a light-hearted short story which really got me hooked on the story!😆 I really admired the blurb of the story mainly because of its simplicity. The concept also feels fresh ‘cause there aren’t many stories which focus on the perspective of a bridesmaid. Most of the time, the focus tends to be heavily on the bride/groom but to see the ‘behind-the-scenes’ of the wedding with a different dimension, it feels unique! Not to mention the aesthetic, not-too-fancy book cover which seems perfect for the lively tone of the short story you have written! The introduction to the characters was so casual, warm-toned and nothing too grand which made me follow the story nicely. More so than the plot in itself, I was especially amazed by the characterisations. Each character seemed to have a personality of their own (e.g how Aunt Jenny likes to be overly particular and authoritative at times about how things should run). I love the main character’s development as well ‘cause her thoughts and emotions seem completely natural and easy to understand. It’s nice to see such character development even within the short story you have written! The pacing of the story seems just nice and the events flow nicely into place. Towards the back end of the book (when the wedding neared), you created this sense of urgency and anticipation which was one of the highlights of the story! Many just look at the grandness of the wedding from the outside and comment on it but only with the perspective of the bridesmaid can we truly see how much planning, work and stress goes behind pulling off the event! I’m glad you were able to show this message through this story!😆 I also observed several mini-lessons peppered throughout the story (e.g learning to accept no as an answer with the encounter with Mike) and these little messages beautify the work even more! I especially enjoyed reading the whole wedding scene when they were making their vows and the reactions of the congregation. The atmosphere was truly exhilarating! Probably the one thing that I felt could be improved was the number of characters?🤣 (i think its just me hehhe) I felt like I was introduced to too many characters and at first it felt overwhelming ‘cause I didn’t know who were the ones the story focuses more on!😅 HAHAH but I think that’s okay. Apart from it, I enjoyed the seamless movement of the scenes and the plot of the story!😆 Now for the use of language which was exceptional! Your writing style is very informal and very relatable! It was hilarious to read the monologues of the main character and it helped in showing her nature. This internal monologue also breaks the fourth wall, engaging the readers very well!😁 It makes you feel into the story. The dialogues mostly seem character-specific and didn’t seem choppy in most parts. I admired the simplicity of your writing; it was clear and easy to comprehend. This makes the work so much more reader-friendly. There weren’t much of grammar or spelling mistakes as far as I read. It’s obvious you know the rules of punctuating in between dialogues and sentences (commas and full stops at the end of dialogues) but in very few places, they were misplaced unknowingly; nothing major in general. With a bit of polishing, it can be corrected! I know it’s a short story, but I just feel descriptions of surrounding and characters' expressions can be elevated just a teeny bit more😅 That detailing will help readers imagine the scenes better in their head. Other than that, your writing is a testament to the fact that less is more after all!😆 All in all, I thoroughly enjoyed journeying through the main character as she goes on managing the wedding! I loved how there wasn’t anything overly-dramatic or cliché in the story! It was just a nice contemporary novel which mirrored elements of the real world perfectly into the story!😆 With a bit of editing, this book is well onto greater heights. There is great potential in your writing (especially your writing style hehe) so yea keep writing and keep shining! Cheers!🥞🥞😋"