Fantastic story!
"I thoroughly enjoyed this story! I think it was wonderful that you developed your characters and made them well-rounded. I kept thinking you were going to wrap things up, but the story just continued! You kept the story progressively moving forward while still maintaining the interest of your reader. I enjoyed the fact that it wasn't a quick, they meet, they fall in love, they live happily ever after, the end. If I were to critique anything though, it would have to be the inconsistency in the timeline. I found that a bit bothersome. There was also some areas that were very repetitive. Overall, great job! You should be very proud of yourself!"