What is your opinion?
We need more!
"I am absolutely hooked on this story! The plot is gripping, the characters are intriguing, and the world-building is just phenomenal. Seriously, I'm only five chapters in and I'm already on the edge of my seat, dying to uncover more secrets. Who is Amber, really? What's the deal with her parents? And what exactly does the Huntress do? Oh, and don't even get me started on the folklore – I'm dying to dive deeper into that. But, okay, I do have to agree with some other readers about the pace. It's super fast, which isn't necessarily a problem at the beginning, but now that we're a few chapters in, it wouldn't hurt to slow down just a tad. A few more hints and details sprinkled throughout would really help to keep readers like me engaged and satisfied. And yeah, about the inner monologue thing. Sometimes it feels like Amber's thoughts are a separate entity from the rest of the story, which can be a little distracting. Personally, I think integrating her inner thoughts with the descriptions of what's happening around her would make for a smoother reading experience. But that is a personal preference. But overall, I'm absolutely loving this book and I can't wait to see where it goes next. Seriously, if you're into mystery, intrigue, and a touch of the supernatural, do yourself a favor and pick this one up. You won't be disappointed!"
Amber's Savior
"REVIEWING AT 5 CHAPTERS I think the plot is really cool! My one note would be it seems some prior knowledge of folklore is required to understand some parts (like the shirt being inside out I didn't get at all) - so maybe trickle that in for those of us who don't read these kinds of stories often so we can like be in on what's going on because I was especially confused by that scene and what it had to do with anything. I do love the characters so far. Amber is spunky and relatable, I do wish there was more showing rather than telling with her backstory since we just kinds get it dumped on us in a paragraph in the beginning - it'd be stronger if it was something we figured out later on. Also, I do think the reveal of Adella could happen after couple of times of her going there - create a bit more tension and anticipation. Maybe leaving breadcrumbs for her first couple times working there, that would make the big reveal more akin to a mystery being solved which would be more satisfying to the reader rather than it kinda happening right away Technically, some of the punctuation is incorrect, but you're okay with spelling and grammar. My biggest note would be the dialogue tags/structure. You'll have two piece of dialogue on separate lines, then kind of hint of that they're being said by the same person?? I would instead do this (totally random example I'm making up in my brain lol): "Hey, how are you?" Amber asks, smiling as she sets down groceries. "Was work busy?" So that way you have them speaking with a pause for narration in between, but it's all in the same line so its easy to tell that it's one person talking the whole time. Generally, having dialogue on separate lines is when the speaker changes Overall, though, great imagination, just a couple things that can be polished up to make this story go from very good to great!"
QUICK AND ENJOYABLE♡
"By now you see I mostly read romance, that is why reading this feels like a *rather* new experience after so long! I am glad I delved into this, though. This story is about Amber, an ordinary woman looking for job to survive. Then suddenly, a lady came to her and offer her a job, but turns out there is more to the lady itself than what appears in the first glimpse, which will bring Amber to the world of magic. I love the pace!! The story's pace is quite fast so it is not boring at all to follow Amber's journey! Also the narrative is quite funny and very engaging lol. Amber can be witty at times, and witty narrative is my all-time favorite to be honest! I also like that Dawn knows how to end the chapter well so it always pique your interest!:) However, as this is a fantasy story, I guess a richer detail will make this story even better. A richer detail for Adella's house, or about the new world-building of Eyarus (it is ok even though from dialogue) and also some parts about Adella will be great. Adella seems mysteriois enough, but not as mysterious as I expect her to be. She does not want anyone peeking through her work place/room, but when Amber just opened the door, Adella was more reserved and even felt guilty, which I guess, after the warning, it is more possible to make her a bit pissed off toward Amber first:) but it is just my opinion! Overall I find this story is totally enjoyable and I am do absorbed in it I finisf reading 5/6 chapters very quickly! Looking forward how you bring this story further, author!^^ Good luck! For fantasy lovers, I think you should give this story a shot!💕👌"
Amber's Savior
"'Amber's Savior' is an intriguing fantasy tale that begins with a relatable struggle. The first three chapters effectively set the stage for a story that promises to blend the mundane with the magical. The story's current chapters are a promising start, and it will be interesting to see how the author weaves the threads of mystery, character dynamics, and potential otherworldly elements in the continuation of the book. "
Interesting so far
"This story is pretty interesting but there is always room for improvement. I'm not too picky about the grammar or punctuation, that can always be edited later, and the few things here and there doesn't prevent the reader from understanding what's going on. Well done in that regard. I think that the biggest thing I can recommend to the writer is to slow down a little bit. It felt like the story was progressing too quickly, but I was left with so many unanswered questions. Perhaps those questions will be answered later on, but they are important questions that I feel might be best to add early on. Such as how did this woman know where the MC lives? What made her choose the MC to offer this job to? What kind of work does this mysterious woman do that requires an assistant (or, at the least, what does she tell Amber that she does)? I think if it is slowed down slightly, it'll also leave room to add more depths to the characters. As of now, it seems any personality and information about the characters are all riding on the dialogue alone. With that being said, it is definitely interesting, and I do want to see what Amber uncovers about Adella. I hope to see all of my questions answered and I'm so very curious about Adella's strange receipts. Keep up the good work and don't give up. "
