What is your opinion?
The Fall of the Queen
"I really liked this story, the plot and the author’s writing style. It was an interesting and exciting story. The interaction between the characters was amazing. I would recommend this story to anyone who loves a great read. "
Treacherous Romance
"Admit was soooooo pissed off a lot of loose ends need to be tied up!!!!"
Deceit
"Captivating "
The fall of the Queen
"I’m not a fan of Royalty and Kingdom stories but this one caught my attention because it already started with caos Knowing your the Queen and your husband is getting married to a second wife sucks So I got so caught up in it because of all the twists and turns and it’s worth it So Yesssss give this story a try"
Fall of the queen
"This story has a great plot and I loved the multiple pov's ,it is definitely a good read !"
Good Start!
"I do like the plot of the book, it reminds of a Webtoon called "The Remarried Empress" (albeit two very diff mediums and the plots are a bit different) - however I do have a couple areas I think could be improved: 1) I believe this would be much stronger written in first person. From these chapters, it's not very dialogue heavy and a lot of the prose is about inner monologue/thoughts/feelings/etc and I think this would be a lot stronger if you told it from first person switching POVs. That way, the reader could really get a sense of what the character was thinking rather than having it come from a third party interpretative lens, especially since I get the idea that this book is going to be heavy in narration rather than dialogue/action driven. In this same vein, there could be stronger showing vs. telling (esp if you do write from third person) 2) there are a couple of grammatical/spelling errors, nothing some proofreading can't fix though. I also think the writing at times can be choppy and the paragraphs are extremely long, so breaking those up would be beneficial just aesthetically. Also, some of the chapters feel like they are starting off in the midst of a thought. Each chapter should give the reader a minute to settle into the scene (even if you do want to start with some kind of attention grabber, then right after set up what's going on. Don't just picked up right where you left off in the last chapter since it can feel a little jarring) 3) The plot is great, and I like that it does have a historical context (because it makes sense that there would be pressure on the king to marry someone else if the queen couldn't produce an heir, regardless of if he wanted another wife or not - I can empathize with both parties predicaments in this case, which gives you a good reasoning for why the reader shouldn't hate the king but also can understand why the queen is angry) I just think there needs to be something extra to set this apart from other stories like this. It's a common trope that I've seen in other contexts and even in other kingdom-type stories, so what sets this apart? I understand if that'll be revealed later in the plot, but I think giving the reader a little something extra up front so they know it's gonna be unique to other stories they've read is important - even if it's in the form of a prologue that doesn't come back until much later in the story. Overall, I think you have a good idea and good writing skills in general. I think if you can just improve on those three general areas, this will go from a good book to a great one. Good luck!"
