I see where you're headed.

"I like where the story is headed, and I can see what you're getting at. I'm getting a "bounty-hunter culture" vibe. However, there are a few things that need improvement. You are very capable of doing this. 1. The story jumps into the adventure without setting a preface; without building the world around the characters. I’m confused as to their whereabouts. A storyline behind these orbs you mention should’ve been given as well. It's difficult to understand their importance when I don't understand their origin. Adding this lore will make the storyline even more powerful! 2. I don’t know who the main or newly introduced characters are yet. They were thrown at the reader without much depth into their background; their personality. However, this descriptive language behind their dialogue is very helpful in understanding how they move as individuals. That's all I caught for now. But like I said before, I see your mission with this book, and it has so much potential. I would strongly suggested you work on these things if you hope to provoke critical thought and emotion from your readers. Best of luck!"