What is your opinion?
Spice and ice
"It’s predictable, which tends to bore me. I’m sorry. It was interesting though."
Needs Work
"I'll start off by giving my compliment: the style you write in is pretty good. It's engaging, immersive, and you describe things very well. I especially liked the chase/combat scene. However, I have a lot of issues with the plot. The most pressing point is he man we're supposed to want her to fall in love with... Raped her. Yes, I'm using that word because he knew she was drugged and wasn't there by her own will, yet still had sex with her. It would have been one thing if he genuinely didn't realize she was drugged, then I could forgive it, but he literally says that he knows she wasn't there by her own free will and still decided to have sex with her?? That's rape. And I do not like the sexualization of rape in any context, especially since he never really apologizes or takes responsibility for it. He rapes her, yet this is a romance story where she's going to fall in love with him? It feels really icky. Beyond that, the plot itself isn't necessarily unique from other mafia/billionaire type romances that I've read before. It's predictable, follows common tropes, and the characters are someone flat and one dimensional. I think you need to step away from the overdone structure of "broody morally-gray rich male finds girl who is plain" - I mean honestly, who tf would date a guy who says to her face that he's shocked he likes her because of how boring and below his standards she is??? There has to be some kind of redeeming quality, but honestly not much could redeem him from raping her. There are also a lot of spelling errors, not a lot of grammatical ones it's mostly all word choice and spelling. Some of the punctuation is off as well. Overall, I think the plot needs some major restructuring. You have the writing skills (minus some technical issues) but this plot does not showcase them very well. Think about what you specifically have to say that nobody else can - what story do YOU need to tell that hasn't been told before? What message are you trying to convey? I think asking those questions could help you fix this plot. Keep it up and I hope this helps!"
