Intensity

"Hi Filippo You write beautifully with great imagery that I can see as I read. You have insight. You see what is really happening behind the facade. The form of the story is a vignette, a snapshot. To give it more punch, there should be an incident. The protagonist is trying to achieve something and the antagonist is trying to help him or harm him. There is an interaction. When you exit the scene, something has changed. The antagonist is not exactly the same person he was going into the scene. He has progressed or fallen back. I'll be looking out for more of your work on this page. "