OR-Ocean

"Hello Elizabeth. First things first. You've managed to begin a delightful tale that garners one attention very quickly. My curiosity to discover something new, exciting, and original in this genre has been thoroughly fulfilling. You have thus far avoided the trite and given us something that stimulates one's imagination. The scenes enacted on paper come alive vividly alive as you describe the less-than-glorious descent of the earthbound messenger (angel). There is a finesse in your writing that speaks toward you being the person to relate this travesty befallen the "new devil". A wise man, much wiser than myself, if I be wise, said to me, " In order to be helped you first need to be hurt"! Here's the hurt. Minus the few misspelled words (angles for angels) and a few others which refuse to immediately surface, you have a great story. Investing in a proper editing tool would immensely enhance your writing, even though you've done well up to this juncture. There are run-on sentences and others, not sentences that detract from one's enjoyment of this promising work. Be mindful as you continue to write that a celestial being attempting to return to the heaven lies can't just go UP! Might not those beings need enter into some dimensional space and time? Continue to create stage reality and you will continue to be noticed. "