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This is a fantastic story. It's so good I'm suprised it's not published already. The author knows how to write, grips the reader the whole way through, and presents very solid characters. There are a few places where it would be better to start a new chapter, when the timezone skips, and one or two minor errors, but the plot was unbelievably good as it drags the reader kicking and screaming from one surprise to another. But although there is a lot going on, the story is written in an easy to read way, and the scenes inside minds were viceral and full of impact.Read the story now
Hi, I like stories about the mind, probably because I'm studying psychology.
This one has some good points, like the first chapter that draws you right in. I did experience a few problems though with the next chapters. The tenses mix present tense and past tense in a way that makes it difficult to read the story and the grammar is poor. The dialogue is snappy. and very well done.
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