A great read of teenage love with exciting fantasy
A great teenage read! With fantasy and anticipation of love all the way through. Very enjoyable for anyone looking to loose themselves in some escapism for a few hours.
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Overall, the plot is strong and once it gathers momentum the writing style becomes more natural and engaging.
For Rebecca - To be constructive, what could make the book better is in particular to work on the opening chapters just a little more. There's a little much small talk - I think the best way to fix this would be to follow one of the great rules for when writing for tv: enter the scene as late as possible and get out as early as you can. It might just help to keep the opening chapters a little punchier. This opening section is also affected by the speech a little. In later chapters speech flows a more naturally than in earlier chapters. It might be easier to print out the first few chapters and read out-loud all the dialogue, this will help to show what needs to be done to make it a little more natural in places.
In summary, really entertaining and I'd be interested in reading the next in (what I expect?) to be the series. At times, it reminded me of 'Hush Hush' by Becca Fitzpatrick. You could read this for comparison too.
Looking forward to the next installment, Rebecca!