Alex

Thinking about ditching my novel 🥀

FINALLYYYY ANOTHER CHAPTER IS OUT ! HOPE YOU ENJOY!!
( SPOILER: Iris is going to get some compliments by someone with pink hair! (⁠≧⁠▽⁠≦⁠))

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Per your request I read the first five chapters, or 4 as you label the prologue as chapter 1. Free tip, by doing that? all the chapters will be offset by number, those of us with ocd will notice it every time. I'm going to pass, I don't know what the story is about, I don't know the genre the story is telling. Is it supernatural, is it a billionaire story, is it a true crime story? Wraith is a strange last name for a main character who isn't a supernatural creature. The main female character looks interesting, except I don't understand why she wants a job. People who live on trust funds don't get jobs, even if they want to keep themselves amused...there's non profit work for that itch. Also, socially inept people, or highly introverted people, don't apply for in person jobs. The constant need to talk to other people would drive them insane. The fact she just applies to the job because her Asian live in friend told her to is strange. What's also strange is the focus on asian named characters for a story based in the US...yet you spell favourite with the english u. The prologue isn't a chapter, it's a conversation between two people that doesn't seem like it benefits the story at all, except as a flashback. I wish you well, I hope the book goes the way you want it to. If you want help learning how to craft stories, look up Cave_Marie, she has a discord channel for new authors.

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