BernadetteP

Kingfu

lol..love the mantis scene and I agree with Elizabeth in regards to the potential pet.

I have just finished chapter 1 and look forward to reading further. I will post another review later, but I wanted to let you know I am enjoying the story.

I am just starting chapter 5 and find your writing to be intriguing..in a scattered sort of way. I find myself consistently surprised between the end of one chapter and the start of the next.

Bumps In the Night

Wow...well done.

At first I was taken back to when I was a child and would hear those bumps in the night. It reminded me of nightmares and being able to change the monsters into friends. Even the bullying, teasing isolation of others brought me back to my own childhood.

I love the dialogue, the softening of a normally staunch principal and the seriousness of the normally jovial uncle. I have only read the first chapter but look forward to reading the rest of the story.

sweet

Your story reminded me of the fox and the scorpion story, but yours is much cuter. However, you told most of the story in the introduction.

The grammar in this one still needs work, but is much better than the first story I read. Keep moving forward it will all come together.

Well Done

Several points of the story spoke deeply to me. I have twin ancestry so I am always interested in stories revolving around twins. My youngest grand daughters are paternal twins and I miscarried paternal twins.

My oldest grand daughter just turned 16 and I think she would love this story. I am in my 50's and loved the story. I have to confess though that I am not really big into the shape shifting stuff, but as a seer I am always interested in stories that are spiritual related and your is.

I look forward to reading more of your work and I will definitely forward your name to my grand daughter.