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I enjoyed the story, I found the intro was great, it really hooked me. Just a couple things,
1. There is just a couple errors here or there, with punctuation and spelling and whatnot.
2. Some sentences are really long and wordy, while the message might be better delivered in a few shorter, simpler sentences, or you can put commas in natural breaks in the sentence, this improves the flow and structure of a sentence.
Overall, really good! I can't wait to read more.
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