Her Name was Katherine
Hi! I'm Brooke, and I saw your post advertising this story. Here's the feedback:
Read the story now
-> Love your plot, and your ideas are fantastic. I think this could make a really great thriller, if you play your cards right and keep improving your craft, which leads me to my next point.
-> Work on your punctuation (Commas. More commas.). Try reading your work aloud - it might help you know where to place them.
-> To be a good author, you have to have a black belt in emotion. There's a lot of action (fun to read, mind you), but I don't sense any feeling behind the words. Work on that.
I'd really love to help you out. Anything I can do?
And: Would it be alright if you read some of my work? I'm new here, and trying to grow as an author. If you could write a review (and Like it, if my work's any good), I'd be very grateful.
The Link: https://www.inkitt.com/stories/action/351232