Luna Agarsha

Nice Job!

The plot is very entertaining, but there's a lack of description. Also, the grammar and punctuation need a little work, but the story overall is great! Keep it up!

Breathtaking.

Your book is complex - everyone has their own unique personalities and views - yet you manage to organize it into a captivating mystery. The vocabulary is vibrant and, unlike many books, speaks to the reader. Amazing work!

....*GASP* AMAZING.

The plot of the story really sent me through a rollercoaster, up and down, up and down. In other words, it was a great read! I connected with a lot of characters. Keep it up!

I loved it! A few suggestions...

Your writing left me spellbound. I loved how real you kept it, and I was following you with every sentence.
2 suggestions:
1. There are some spelling issues - where are there not - but capitalizing is key to keeping a good poem. Make sure that all your lines are capitalized with good spelling and no strange gaps?
2. There are parts of the poem that were more in paragraphs rather than lines. In any poem/story, line spacing is important. It can define a moment of truth, a powerful spot in time.

A spot in memory,

^ See what I did there??? Haha well, I'm not as good a writer as you - but try to keep your lines short, and if not, split your paragraphs into more lines.

Was this really based on your life? That shattered me. Your poem was truly beautiful.

Keep on writing, you have a talent for it!