I've never written a review this long before and I hope you don't mind. I know how challenging it is to write a story for I'm a new author myself, and if someone were to read my story I would like some tips to make my book even better and to maybe have a shot at publishing it. So I hope you take my review as tips or guidelines and not as a harsh critique.
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I love your writing style, and the characters are great. I would love to know what time period and country your story is taking place, due to the slavery aspect of your story and arranged marriages.
I applaud Johnathan for being so respectful to her in the time period he's served her. I do on the other hand, wish he would of put himself out there and told Alena how he felt about her, maybe a year or two after her husband's passing. After only a year of being with her husband (in an arranged marriage where her heart wasn't fully stolen by him), I believe 3 years is far fetched of not moving on. Repressed feelings can cause damage to people, especially repressing love, so I'm quite surprised Johnathan hasn't gone crazy all these years working side by side with her.
Reading the few details about Quentin's time at the farm where he was being forced to be a slave was indeed sad, but yet he seems so genuine, sweet, calm, caring, loving etc. which are all great qualities to have, but if he was a slave and his time spent on the farm was god awful, I believe a natural person would have some hate and negativity held in their heart and wouldn't fall emotionally attached to someone they just met not too long ago. But everyone is different I suppose.
I do hope you go more in detail on his time spent as a slave, more details as to what happened to him during his enslavement, how he became a slave in the first place, what happened to his parents, and how he's coping with it now.
I would also love to read more about Fredrick's murderer. Who was he? Has Alena ever tried to find out who Fredrick's killer was and why he was killed? Why did the murderer spare her life knowing she was a witness?
And what about her parents? Did her parents arrange the forced marriage?
Maybe I'm getting WAY too ahead of myself (Since I'm only on chapter 8) and maybe in your upcoming chapters you were already planning on adding some of these details, and if you were I'm sorry. I'm just so excited about your story! I really do enjoy reading it. All in all keep it up, you're a great writer and I hope you are encouraged to keep writing. :)