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Will be reading the next chapters too
Perfect mix of darker-ish themes, beautiful visuals / gore-ish visuals, poetic writing, the metaphors and just all the emotions you make me feel through all of the above
I really want to see this one through, no pressure there
You've mistaken 'then' for 'than'
And other than that little grammar mistake, I really cant find anything wrong with this story.At all.
A personal favorite moment of mine so far, is the description of the tree in chapter 2, the tree itself, the leaves, the irony of the whole thing with the carved heart and initials in the trunk of it..
Scratch that, theres no favorite moments, all of it is favorite moments
The scenery, the bodies, 'why has god forsaken us', the hunters, the writing.I love all of the utter desperation, destruction, gloominess, uncertainty and overall awfulness going on for these guys
Can't wait to see what will follow! Would love to see more on how these people are living
Great concept !
Really nicely punctuated (creates complimentary effect to your writing style)
Your grammar is good, but I think you've confused the word 'waist' with the word 'waste'
I really really enjoy your writing style in this.
You have some amazing skill going on! The descriptions are of course perfect (I get way too excited when I read something like that and you just make my fingers itch for some paint and paper), I just love all the scenery and the mythology references!
The plot in the second chapter felt kind of rushed(but not really?Have difficulty describing what felt off about it.Basically, I felt like it would be more 'story like' and the events would slowly develop), but the scenery and poetic-ness (?) was very well received.
Very very glad Ive stumbled upon you. Hope this review isnt too much of an eyesore. :-)
I love it when someone can make really nice imagery with just a few words, I think thats my favorite part in this poem
It was heavily emotional and since its also poetic, it was very dramatic at some points
I dont really like the drama and it finished weirdly for me (basically it didnt click just right for me)
but thats all my personal taste and doesnt really matter
You did manage to take my breath away through the journey and thats what does matter
You did very well, so congrats for creating this :-) *thumbs up*
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