Ray Dread

Boise

Writing thriller fantasy cause I keep dying in minecraft

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It was all good!!!

I have never given someone full stars before. This story is full of action, and you created a world that was completely your own! I found it very refreshing, and amazing, and it very well deserves a full rating.

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Useless Wordings

I didn't find it interesting, I didn't really see a point to most of it, nor was it entertaining. The title itself is long and drawn out, almost exhausts anyone who's an avid reader and understands that long titles and exasperated wording has nothing to do with skillful writing. The sexist undertones were prevalent and annoying.
It was almost as if a dictionary and a thesaurus gave birth to recycled newspaper and called it good. I guess what I'm saying here is that it needs a lot of work. A LOT.

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WRITE MORE!!!

(Oh my gosh when is the next chapter coming out!!!??? #dyingoverhere) I swear if this gets deleted I will go jump off a bridge. Seriously I want to read more of this . . . I got so disappointed when I came on here and saw that it was not updated. Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh :'(

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Kind of a hard read

I have to say that the ideas are pretty great, I like people that wield fire and destroy things when their emotions act up. The only thing I would say that is a little rocky is how you put your sentences together. It isn't very smooth, but it is correct when looking at it grammar wise.

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Wonderment

Wait . . . what? I left this story with a sense of wonderment, amazing description held me defenseless and off guard. I was searching the word "Frost" for a possible name for one of my new story's, and I stumbled upon this one. How lucky was I to have read something so different, so strange and deviant from the normal story's I usually read. Good job.

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Wow . . . oh did I say that backwards?

This story has an amazing amount of wonder and suspense. I was shocked almost, at how it hit me square in the face when I started to get into it. This is something I am going to put on my very picky reading list, something that I will retreat to when my head is full of the nothingness called writers block. Its full of life and potential, and I am hoping to see more of it in the future. (10 thumbs up) Good job Phoenix Andre Clouden, you are an amazing human being, keep up the good work!

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The Dreamscape

Different . . . very different. Its kind of scary if you think about it, but interesting. Like a bad dream. It connects really well with the real world, and as I am reading I seem to be sucked in there with the characters.

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Fox's Serum

It left me breathless! I cannot put into words the shear beauty and amazing skill it must of took to right such a wonderful piece of work as this! It is art! It is so beautiful I just can't even! The only thing I would be iffy on is the fact that Adams mate died so suddenly, I mean, working up to it would of been a little smoother, but other than that, it was so wonderful I just felt like flopping over and dying. I have always had this connection with foxes, loved the wondrous animals with their silky red fur, that's what attracted me to your story, and this just captured them so well it was breathtaking. Great job, stupendous job! Bravo and encore!

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Cannibal Feast

Its a little cliche, but it wasn't bad. I found it fun and a little disturbing, which I think is what you were going for, so it was pretty good, but the idea of cannibalism over desperation is a little overused.

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