I have to say, I was pleased to be reading a story that has obviously been edited well before it was posted. I know how excited we all get to have our creations out there, and how hard t is to actually edit your own work, myself included. This author took the extra steps, and it doesn't escape the reader.
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I am intrigued by the story in it's completed chapters, enough so that I will be waiting for more of this work to appear. In the first few chapters, I will admit, I though, "okay, it's going to be disturbing erotica, with a story laced behind the sex." I am so glad I was wrong. I have nothing against the genre, but if an author can pull out a decent story, so that the reader could actually retract the disturbing details and still have a story that someone wants to read, that makes a great writer and story. This author is fully capable.
I have no clue how it will develop any further, beyond what I myself would write, but some how I doubt my ideas will be the road that is traveled, and that makes me all the more intrigued to see what takes place. Please continue, your readership is on the edge of their seats.