Daeda1us

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Interesting

Hello and thanks for sharing your work!

I understand what you were trying to do, unfortunately it was obvious (to me) from the beginning. You refused to use pronouns for the bedmate. This clearly indicated the 'twist' to come.
Honestly, I am not sure how you could avoid that issue, unless you removed the part about "two sleeping figures". Not sure that would work either.
Bringing up Harry Potter was a nice attempt to divert from the 'twist'.
All in all, solid work.
I would definitely be interested in reading more of your work.

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