A very excellent beginning to a novel.
I appreciate the fact that you started with such a action orientated beginning, as it instantly captivated and interested me. I feel like the whole "lone survivor" act has been done before, but I may be wrong as I read more into this story.
Something that really bothered me was the lack of commas. Maybe its just a difference in writing styles but I found myself expecting a comma but seeing nothing. This is was especially important during dialogue, as pauses I was expecting did not occur.
Other than that I thought it was a really interesting story and I look forward to reading more.
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