Thank you for a great story! Loved every minute of it, from the beginning of 'My Warden' to the very end of this one; it brought me lots of laughs, tears and near heart attacks, the latter of which are the most difficult to cause, in my opinion. Doesn't take much to amuse or sadden readers, but it takes some good writing to keep them on the edge of their seat, cursing themselves for not being able to read faster, which is what I found myself doing especially during the last scenes in the fortress. Although the flashback parts were difficult to read at times, it was only because it was so hard to pull back from the immediacy of our two heroes' quest, and Lana's struggle.
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I felt that the characters were very natural and the story was true to the spirit of Dragon Age. Also I found myself chuckling out loud from the story's humor. And I just have to say that the epilogue was one of the best parts. It made me really excited to move on to the sequel. Thanks for sharing your work!