Hey, just finished reading through this. I wasn't sure you could top the previous one, but you definitely did. Your characters have more substance to them this time. More details, drama, angles, plot twists, etc. I love the character of Andra, especially in the building stages of her character. Every time I think she's come to terms with how her life is changing, she goes off and proves me wrong again. I like the method you used for when Tiri marked Andra. We all knew it was coming, but you did it in a way that we didn't quite expect. I loved the character of Colmen and as much as I didn't want him to go, I appreciate an author that is willing to kill off beloved characters in order to advance and strengthen the story. Your punctuation, grammar, etc. was much better this time, I only spotted 2-3 tiny inconsequential things in there. The ending seemed a little anti-climatic to me, I think just because the final battle in Rising Sun was so intense in comparison. Also, because the remnants of the falling action in this one seemed to be dragged out a little in my mind. Not that big of a deal though, as overall I really loved what you did with this one. Also, I see some congratulations are in order since Rising Sun won the Hidden Gems contest. Good job and congratulations, but in many ways, Bright Star is even better.
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