Evelin B. Selem

Sydney, AU

(Updates: BN: Mondays at 7;30 (Australian Time) and HOD: Mondays at 7pm (also Australian Time). 24, aspiring writer who's hopeful to self publish one day. All Works: © 2020 Evelin B. Selem

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Author, Do Not Be Discouraged

This book was too fast paced. Jamie and Adrian went from girlfriend/boyfriend to s*x partners then to husband and wife in a matter of 40+ chapters. Author kept changing Jamie's name to Rochelle and Jamie's daughter's name from Lilly to Delilah which was really confusing. Chapters were short and not much thought went into them. The plot had some major issues. For example the last chapter states that Adrian and Jamie got married and had a baby and that's it. There's no explanation as to how they had a baby in two months when in reality it should be nine months. I also think many things in the book should've had an explanation, like Adrian breaking up with Jamie all the time or why he wasn't the one to tell Jame that he had kids to two different women. The characters were not developed well, I felt like I was given the whole bad-boy-meets-good-girl vibes. Overall, I feel like this book has potential and if it were to be rewritten, the chapters made longer and the book had more chapters then it would've reached the hearts of true readers. My review was not to discourage the author, in fact, I applaud you for sharing your books with us. The way it is now is good and you have done well, so good job.

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Great Book!, Great Plot Twists!

I was drawn in by the book's title. I loved the plotline and all the twists and turns that it had but the book moves to quickly and needs to be slowed down and the events that have happened need to be spaced out more like Jackson and Leana find out bits of information as they come across/discover it. I would love to seem some information about how Leana's mum died and some background info on Jackson, I'd like to know more about him other than just his name that he's the future alpha. I understand that this is an ongoing story and the author is most likely to edit the book after it's completed but spelling is also a minor issue that can be fixed, I'm no spelling or grammar police so I'll leave it at that.. In places words get jumbled up and I found it hard to read at time, in one chapter Jackson's name was missing from the paragraph and I found it difficult to read. However, it saying that, I did manage to get to the lasted chapter and am excitedly waiting patiently for more. Overall, I love this book and will definitely be recommending this anyone who asked me for great books to read on Inkitt. I really hope my review helps the author.

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Wow!

Wow, I'm so glad that I followed Zhavia and gave this book a read. I was sucked in by the cover but the plotline is was got me. I loved the conflict between the group of girls and Scarlett, and I loved how she had some very witty comebacks too. I noticed some spelling errors, I'm not part of the grammar/punctuation police so I'll leave it as that. This book has great potential and can see Zhavia going very far with this book and future books.

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