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Good Plot

Writing this on the full basis of Chapter 1, the story's plot is good. However as the last review said, there is need for better spacing of the text. Also there is a sudden overuse of the pronoun "she", I hope this doesn't persist with the other chapters, e.g "she turned...."

Otherwise I have to say it is a good piece of work and I am looking forward to the rest of it.
Keep up the good work.

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Brilliant!

Having completed the first chapter alone I can say it is an outstanding piece of art. The way people are described paint a vague picture of the person in the readers mind. The use of italics to separate thoughts from actual spoken words and text. The story is one that all of us can relate to as well as people attempting to write our own books. I truly look forward to the rest of the chapters.

Thank you! Odd as it may be to thank the author for the book.

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