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Very Engaging Read

As you know, I very much enjoyed this story. All of the main cast you introduce have great potential, and for the most part I think they meet it, though there is still room for growth at the end (sequel?). You do a great job with creating moral dilemmas for Gabriel, and I think that you do a great job using those dilemmas to gradually mature him as a character- I can definitely say that he's changed by the end of the story. You made me really want to see more of the relationships between Chance, Fairy, and Gabriel, and the fact that you built that up so well in the first portion of the story made some of the stuff that happened with Gabriel later on (should I refrain from spoilers in case others read this review...) all the more suspenseful. Both the content and your writing style really kept me on the edge of my seat and unable to stop reading. You built up suspense to pivotal moments in the story and then delivered on the anticipation. The only thing I really have to complain about is the fact that the story ends where it does, which is to say that I think you should continue writing. Job well done

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