Hannah Mros

Sweden

I'm just a normal 18 year old girl with a passion for writing, stick around if you want to escape reality for a little while

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A fun interesting quest

“The Raven” is a fun adventure with a lot of likable characters and an interesting setting. The author captures the character’s personalities perfectly and make it believable that they’re still kids even though their tough upbringing (which some books fail to do). One thing to improve is more description of the characters. You get a clear picture of who they are as people but not so much appearance wise.

Overall I really love this book and would recommend it to basically everyone.

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So exciting!

I really like your style of writing and of course the story itself. Even though you're only at the beginning I'm already intrigued.

I love how much development the characters already have, I'm a sucker for characters and it's my favorite part of every story so a story like this that focuses a lot on characters is easily going to be a favorite a man.

Some things you could think about is to refer to characters by their name when there are more than two people in a conversation. Sometimes you use "she" a lot and since there's a lot of females in this story it can be a little confusing sometimes. And like basically everyone there are a few grammar mistakes here and there but they're easy to fix with a re-read of the chapters and the help of a grammar checker, I personally use Grammarly.

I hope any of this helped and motivated you to keep writing this story!

/Hannah

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Unique in the best way

First, of all, I really enjoyed this story even though it took a while to read all the chapters. This story is really different and unique and I think it's really interesting.

As for the characters I really enjoy Ace and Theo. I think they're very good and characters and you can sense the depth in them. I also need to compliment your writing, it is absolutely amazing and I wish I could write as good as you.

Some things I things you could think about is maybe explaining the world a little more because I'm having a little bit of a hard time grasping where this story is set, is it a fantasy world? Is it set in the future?... Maybe take a little more time explaining the world to make sure the reader knows where the story is set. In my opinion, you could make the chapters a little shorter but that just a personal preference some people love long chapters.

Overall I really enjoy your story and I'm so excited to keep reading.

/Hannah

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