Pretty freaking amazing
Your storytelling skills simply blow my mind. I'm beyond wowed. From the diverse characters to their roles in the story, to the original plotline playing on a well-beloved cliche, it's all amazing. I loved how this story kept me on my toes, kept me laughing, kept me hooked since 10:00 PM all the way to 3:40 AM. The character development was amazing, especially with Emerson and Valerie's characters, and I felt as if I truly understood each and every character, their motivations, and their emotions. The only thing I would recommend you to keep an eye out for is grammar. I, as an aspiring author myself, know the hardships of writing even without worrying about grammar and making sure every comma and semi-colon are in place. And while the story itself makes up for the few mistakes I've seen (and it could very well be my exhausted eyes) I would only advise you to go over each chapter once more after you've written it and fix any mishaps.
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Once again, I congratulate you on the amazing story so far, and I cannot wait to see how their tale ends.