JBaxter10

Fun, light read

I really enjoyed this story! I thought the main character was sassy, fun and full of spunk. I'm curious to see what happens between her and Beatriz. Does their little squabble escalate? Does Beatriz try and steal something else from Savanah or try to replicate the three wish spell? I'm so excited to read more of the story and find out what happens. :)

One suggestion I have is to work on showing, not telling. I think this can sometimes be hard and can take a lot of work (I struggle with this sometimes too). I would look at each section and try writing the scene as if it's happening right now using as much detail as possible. Also read lots and lots of books in the genre you want to write.

This really was a wonderful story! Can't wait to read more of your work. :)