Jetstream Artorias

Manchester, England

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The story you didn't know you wanted but got anyway

Ginny Luna and Neville being the front of the resistance in Hogwarts was something that I'm sure a lot of fans wanted to see. Harry, Ron and Hermione camping in the woods for a year was an interesting change of pace, but book 7 was just missing a certain degree of liveliness that the other 6 had to some degree. Also, we needed a full look into how Neville, the kid who was Malfoy, Crabbe and Goyle's favourite chew toy, turned into Harry 2.0.

This is the book 7, B Side we all wanted, whether we knew it or not.

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Aww Yiss, Sequels

So I had meant to leave a review after reading this the first time, but I never did, because of reasons. Naturally, this meant I'd have to read this a second time to give a proper review.

The biggest strength this story has is the characters. Andra and Kael are well thought out, but the supporting cast, when they actually appear also have their little quirks that make them individuals.

Andra's changes throughout the story feel like they have all been earned, and they don't just happen instantly. They take their time to appear, and they take repeated exposure to new circumstances that tell her she is in fact more than what she thought she was before. Without giving away too much, this makes events that happen in the third 'act' a lot more impactful.

Those of us expecting a true sequel to Sky Riders 1 may feel a little disappointed, as only one of the characters from the first story appear in the second. The final chapters of the story also seem to lose momentum somewhat, as though they were put there to make the story 55 chapters long. They feel a little slice of life compared to what came before, which isn't necessarily a bad thing.

All in all, I look forward to more, especially since Book 3 looks like it is going to be a true sequel.

Pros
+ Interesting characters
+ Natural flow to the story from beginning to end
+ Promise of a true sequel

Cons
-Finite Word Count
-Almost 0 returning characters due to 200 year timeskip.

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Aww yiss, Dragons

So I've been itching for stories with dragons for a while, and when I saw this on the front page, I thought I'd give this story a go. Overall, I enjoyed reading it. Though it is not the most unique of plots, the execution is solid, and the characters' exploits are enjoyable to follow.

The only real problem I can think of is that there are no real antagonists until a fair way into the story itself, but when Prince Nocens appears, he makes up for it by being a Dio Brando level of asshole in short order. Its not subtle, but at the same time, I don't feel like I mind.

Without giving away too much, there is one element of the story which I find to be rather sudden in its introduction, and in its resolution with regards to how it affects the plot. It makes some sense in context to have this particular element be a non issue, but at the same time, more could have been done with this.

The world feels like it has nuances beyond what is covered in Book 1, and I look forward to future stories from this universe.

Good points:
+ Overall enjoyable and mostly relaxing read
+ A villain you really want to see lose.
+ World looks like it could be fun to have stories in.

Bad points:
-Abrupt introduction of antagonists and one other plot element.
-Finite word count

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