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Interesting

The very beginning of this story is somehow unusual, but intriguing. And so is the rest of the story. I love how you travel through centuries and you know how to write and how to make your characters behave in all those worlds, how to make them adapt and show that they belong there; this makes the story all the more believable. It gets even more interesting when those worlds intertwine and we become aware of Linda being a Lamia as you would call it. This is thought-provoking. Furthermore, Dr. James’s story was a real surprise and I would never have guessed that he knew so much a long time ago. This is a rather unusual story, with a not-so-common topic and I believe that it could be made into a great movie.

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Mystery is always great

I have thoroughly enjoyed this mysterious, enigmatic and baffling adventure. I love how it started off in a completely ordinary setting, with a description of an ordinary day of a person working as a detective and with not a lot on their hands – just some paperwork done in no time. However, things quickly change, starting with the call that Beth got. The call not only hinted at a great mysterious adventure to be expected, but also showed that this is not an ordinary story and that there are also werewolves involved. From that point, the story just gets more and more interesting, with Max’s death complicating things even more. However, eventually, the truth does come out and I love how you ended this story. This is a job well done!

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WOW

I enjoyed reading this so much. I felt like I left the real word for the time I was reading this and entered this fantasy world which you created. And everything felt so real that I caught myself feeling what the characters are feeling. I was happy for them, I felt sorry for them, I even cried at the scene when Ella died and I was angry when Jordan revealed his true self. I was rooting for Alyx to kill him, but even though that did not happen, I was pleased with the ending. If the readers expect a happy, corny ending, then they should definitely not read this. But if they expect a story full of emotions, full of excitement, and intrigue, then this is definitely the right story.

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Amazing

The thing I liked the most about this story is that it shows how much thought you have put into it, how much you have dedicated yourself to it, to telling it right, to not missing a detail. This is a great feature and especially esteemed when it comes to writers. You have planned out the plot carefully and the scam was perfectly premeditated, perfectly executed and perfectly depicted. Barry’s whole life seems like a roller-coaster and it is only fair to pin something like this to his character. And yet, I could not blame him. Instead, I rooted for him. This is another great trait of your style of writing. You can make anyone likable and you can make any kind of act justifiable. I loved this.

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The thrill of the fight

This is an exciting, stirring and amazing story. The very first sentence consumed me, intrigued me, while at the same time hinting at what I am to expect from the rest of the story. It is dynamic, with powerful narratives, as well as powerful dialogues. Once I started reading, I could not look away. It kept me attentive right through the end. I read it in one breath and I constantly felt as if I were watching a great movie. The ending just left me wanting to read more of this – it was kind of like when you watch the last episode in a season of your favourite show and now you are both amazed and angry because it ended and you have to wait for more. This pretty much sums up the feeling I got. I love this story.

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Exciting and Enjoyable!

I must commend the vivid descriptions of the „New World“, which is very important and very convenient for the start. It sets the scene very well, so that the reader gets immediately acquainted with and alerted about what they can expect from the plot and from further reading. I love the first person perspective; it makes the story much more personal. I loved the idea of uniting the Skulls and the Spirits, even though that seemed almost impossible when first thought of. I also like the nicknames you chose for your characters; they can be a bit revealing about the nature of their bearers. Overall, I have really enjoyed and I recommend this story.

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Amazing!

The story is very descriptive from the very beginning, which made it easy for me to picture every scene in my head and feel as though I just traveled to another world – to the world of the story you are telling. I read very carefully in order to understand the interconnection between every character in the story and every character in the story in the story. I love this concept of a story in a story by the way. I love how your writing has a great flow to it – it makes your story easily read and easily drawn into. I was eager to find out every little detail of what is going to happen next and I must say that I am pleased with how the story ended. You do not reveal too much, but yet enough to understand everything. This is another thing I love in a writer. You know how to keep your readers engaged by making them think and make their own deductions, while providing them with enough information in order not to make it too difficult to read. I have really enjoyed this.

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Strong recommendations

This is a rather serious topic. Unfortunately, there are more people who can relate than those who cannot. I would like to congratulate you on making this story in order to help raise people’s awareness about the importance of understanding depression and being there for the people who are going through it. Your story is very informative and it carries a strong message. Words really do hurt, as you say it yourself. The outcome for Annielese is pretty unfortunate, but I understand why you had to write it this way. I would suggest that you do further editing, so that your story gets through to people more easily and that they take it more seriously.
And I have a question. “Emotionally, I’m done. Mentally, I’m drained. Spiritually, I’m dead.” – I read this a lot online. Is it originally yours?

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Mysterious

I love how the descriptions in this story really draw you in, make you interested in what is actually going to happen. You have this intriguing style of writing that captures and consumes the reader. From the start, I felt like I was entering some magical world, when you described the canines and felines, their various colors and the battle. I love how mysterious the story is. And I almost felt sorry for Lucifer, I must admit. But this is due to your ability to make any character likable, no matter what. Overall, I have enjoyed this story immensely and I love how abruptly it ends, with a hint of not being finished at all. I would only suggest further editing and proofreading.

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Soothing but saddening

A great mysterious adventure. I love it. The beginning is dynamic. The plot is thrilling and exciting and the descriptions are very vivid. The story enchants you from the start, makes you keep reading and makes you curious about what is going to happen next. This is a great trait of your style of writing. It seems as if you could make any kind of story interesting, simply by using this perfect writing style. I could imagine every scene and I felt sometimes that I was living the story together with the characters. I felt for the characters and I was a bit saddened at the ending. Overall, I have really enjoyed this beautiful story.

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Short and sweet

The story starts of as a kind of a fairy tale. However, the very beginning is soon directed right to the point and it becomes clear that it is going to get far more serious. You have a nice style of writing, with enjoyable descriptions and great characters portrayal. The fact that a brother and a sister are fighting each other, and both for their own causes they believe in, makes this story even more exciting and thrilling. And you have a great way of engaging the reader. I felt like I was part of the story while reading it. I felt sorry for May in the end, but I liked how you ended your story in a kind of a cliffhanger. I wonder if you will write more of it. I’d certainly love to read it if you do.

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Amazing!

The very beginning of the story is thrilling and engaging. I have to commend your style of writing. You sort of eased me into the story, and before I realized what was happening, I was completely taken in, enthusiastic and impatient about what is going to happen next. I could understand the struggle Brooklyn was going through and I felt for her. I also comprehend Jax’s point of view after being shot and his thoughts on death. As he himself says, although this seemed like an unhappy ending, it was everything but that. They got what they wanted, they are happy and they would not change a thing. And neither would I about this story. Well done!

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Nice

The story is definitely worth reading. The idea of it is great and the storyline is pretty dynamic. It is futuristic, but yet believable. I loved how you made the whole story mysterious, but I believe that you could do that even better. You could get slower at revealing things, make the reader intrigued and eager to read more and see what happens. I love how the story is full of these tiny details which help to make it believable. For example, I really loved how you portrayed the memory sharing process. The story lacks a bit in descriptions. Those would really help in getting the reader on board and make them get lost in your story. Also, it needs a lot of editing and proofreading. I think this is the most important thing you need to change. Overall, I really enjoyed the story and I think it could be made into a great movie, with some improvement of course.

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Thrilling

This story comes from a really great, well-baked idea. It can be seen that you put a lot of thought to it and that is worth of appreciation. Your descriptions are vibrant and intense and you are really great at revealing your characters’ characters through the story, through their actions, thoughts and feelings, and not by simply describing them. The concept of the distrust in the Government is something anyone can relate to, which makes the story all the more interesting. It is thrilling, mysterious and captivating. I have really enjoyed reading it and I would strongly recommend it to anyone.

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Enjoyable

This story is really nicely written. You have very vivid descriptions and your style of writing is commendable. The story started off dynamically and made me want to read it; this is great, since you have that something which captures the eye of the reader at once and makes them eager for more. Fitzwilliam is a very interesting, intriguing and captivating character. I love the amusing conversations and his ignorance when he arrives to the future. This shows a witty side of yours, and I always love that in writings. I would love to read more of his adventures, which I hope you will write soon.

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Right in the feels

Wow. I cannot explain how I felt while reading this story. Sad about the destiny of the character, happy about how you have done great in capturing everything. Anorexia, schizophrenia, the problem of surrounding yourself with negative people, with people who, for some reason, influence your life and make it worst instead of better. And you cannot see the negative influence and you cannot explain yourself why you are unable to fight it off, why you are unable to tell those people off. The topic of the story is very relatable and saddening. I love the whole idea and I have really enjoyed reading this.

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Loved it!

This is a refreshing kind of sci-fi. The humor really adds to the story, to its believable part. The plot itself seems a little uncanny, but if you dig under the surface, you can see the depth of the topic, you can see the serious (and not at all laughable) idea behind the story. It seems as if you captured real life, all those unusual happenings, inexplicable situations people find themselves in, those baffling actions and choices beyond comprehension that humans make – and you explained them and clarified them, and in an amusing way as well, without losing the touch of humor which is so important here. Everything is a bet, I guess. Great job.

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Perfect!

This story is astonishing. You somehow managed to write on a dark and serious topic in a perfectly amusing way. The story is full of sarcasm from the very beginning, it is as interesting as it gets. You have a witty, entertaining style of writing and I just love it. I could not take a smile of my face through the whole story, even though I was worried for the characters at certain points. You just make everything seem so easy and turn problems into astounding adventures. This gives a nice flow to the story. And I have to say that I simply ADORE the titles of your chapters. Titles are an important part of any story, they make the reader either interested or bored. Yours would get anyone curious. I love this story.

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