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Great stuff!

This is a great concept, and I like the emotions you've put into it. Emma is a relatable character, and I can't wait to see how the relationship between her and Alex progresses.

I did see some minor grammar issues, but they weren't glaring, and a few proofreads can easily catch them.

Great job! I'll be continuing this as you update.

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Good job so far!

Overall, this is a solid start. I do like Katrina, and I like how the first official chapter (after the prologue) was introduced like a hunt but it turned into a game of capture the flag. It kept me interested and wanting to find out what happens.

I do think running this through a grammar check (Grammarly is great!) would help the overall grammar, punctuation, and other mechanical issues. There are some run on sentences, and some details that could be tightened up. For instance, instead of repeating the snow was fluffy, you could compare it to something, or use other adjectives to describe it. Let your readers know how Katrina feels and what's going on in her mind using internal dialogue- don't simply tell us.

Good start though! I'd be interested in reading more.

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