Wow I really loved this story, right from the start you had me hooked in and I just had to keep reading. Your characters are great and I liked your descriptions of food and interiors.
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To improve, I would suggest maybe giving it a read through. Your sentences all make sense, but some especially near the start could maybe have the words ordered a little bit better. Also, when people are speaking, maybe put them on a new line or something to make that a little clearer :)
Overall I think this is a really good book, you seemed to settle into the writing more as the story progresses as I think it flows better then. If anyone enjoys reading romance, I would definitely recommend that they check this book out. Well done, great work! Excited to read your next book!