Lana Augustine

Atlanta

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I think you should get an English speaking Beta. I don't understand what's going on but that might just be because English isn't your first language.

Can you explain what the story is about?

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I personally don't like the way this story is written. It reads very awkwardly like the words don't match up. I suggest you run your chapters through a text to speech.

The plot is really good, the story is fast pace but it fits.

I think the dialog is a bit clunky and characters tell a bit too much to the point where I can see what's coming. But I can see how someone would want to read this. It has some kind of appeal even if it's not for me.

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I personally found this story boring mostly because I'm not that big into vampire romance anymore (blame Twilight).

I read all the way to chapter 10 I would like more world-building, character development, and arcs. I think some of the characters fall flat. There are plenty of articles on character development that could help you out.

This isn''t a bad story it's just not my cup of tea but I can understand the attraction for some readers.

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