Addictive and inticing
The author uses poetic and hypnotic language that captivates the reader. So much fun vocab, I am in love with your writing style. One critique I have is that the flowing language can be a little much in places where the reader needs to know something important. In general, the style fits amazingly with the story, but there were times when it was hard to grasp what was going on. Minimal grammar and punctuation mistakes but there were a few. One other thing I would like to add, maybe build up the romance a little more? I feel like we don't know much about Xavier or Xander, so maybe build up the tension a bit more.
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Very good read that I highly recommend for fluent english speakers, in all, an amazing first 10 chapters. I can’t wait until the update!