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Review for "Sky-blue flower"
I really like how descriptive you are! But I feel like you're using a lot of "big" words to make the story sound more interesting. Which isn't a bad thing, but when you do it in nearly every sentence it kind of makes me want to groan. I guess here's what I'm trying to get at; Simplicity isn't your enemy. It's alright for the character to look away than look elsewhere, and I would give an example for describing the trees differently but I'm not entirely sure what you meant when you said that they were exuberant, as I'm not sure how the trees were excited XD
But I liked the story over all.
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