LizzyBeth

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Awesome start!

This is an awesome start to what seems to be a promising book. I really enjoy the personalities of your characters and I can't wait to see how they continue to develop! There were some grammar mistakes but everyone makes them so don't worry! :) I can't wait to continue reading!

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I've been caught

My only problem is I want to read more! It was very interesting and had me captured right off the bat. There were a few grammar mistakes but everyone has those! I hope you write more, I want to know who this mysterious male character is. Great job!

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Great!

I love your style. Although I'm not a fan of romance, your word choice entranced me! I think you have great potential to go far!

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Great start!

I think you're on to a really great start! I would recommend changing the "&" symbol form your first chapter and you tended to repeat some phrases like "most notorious pickpocketer" etc. I can't wait to read more!

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Amazing

Your story really captures your characters well. I really enjoy how you use the banter between them to develop the characters! I can really appreciate the way you've portrayed Titania. Speaking from experience, you've really captured realistic outcomes as causes of abuse. I can't wait for you to continue this story!

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So cool!

I really enjoyed reading this! The only thing I would recommend is developing your characters more before going too much further into the book and adding some more imagery. I really like how the book has the different perspectives and I think it works really well for your book. Your style is nice and so far, it's easy to follow! Keep up the good work!

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Great Start!!

You are definitely off to a great start! There's a few grammar and punctuation issues but overall it's really good! I would be careful on where you go next with the story, if you aren't careful, it could resemble Twilight a bit and some people can be really touchy about it.

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