MAJensen

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Just Lovely

Wonderful! I adored the concept that so much adventure could take place in a single tavern, making the title very poignant. There were a few minor spelling errors, but the story was a very smooth read and your style excellent.

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Nice

That was great. I loved the matter-of-factness of it, how not only unicorns but pink unicorns are such a normal thing, and you as the reader kind of accept it despite the absurdity of it. That's not an easy thing to accomplish.

Critique wise, you do tend to get a bit repetitive at times, and I think the tension could be drawn out a little more during the showdown, maybe more description of the scene with the two groups facing off, staring each other down, with the few townfolk still out scrambling to find shelter - that kind of thing.

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