This was such a great musketeer story!! I really enjoyed the beginning section and how you portrayed Aramis' conflicted emotions about being led back into the fold; then how with subtle urging from Athos he admitted this was where he wanted to be anyway.
I like your depiction of Athos as feeling uneasy in the skin of Captain. But what I really enjoyed was the interaction here between Athos and d'Artagnan, as Athos baring his soul is a rare thing. Your feel for the characters and how they speak was spot on. I could feel the warmth between them - much like father to son. And your ending rounded off perfectly - Aramis glad to back with his brothers.
Very well done!!!
I enjoyed this very much!! You described their nightmare of war vividly - the heartache here was palpable. Your depiction of Sammie - his good heart; his love of family; and his strength of character was described beautifully. That you described their anguish; and memories of war with the back drop of celebration brought a tear to my eye. Thanks for sharing this!Read the story now
I thought that was a great start. The interaction between Pink and the Detective led me to believe that there is an adversarial history there. The appearance of "Snake" as a villain tells me that you have some interesting criminals to share in this universe. I like Pink Punch!! She seems strong; sassy and wants to take out the bad guys. I enjoyed the banter between her and the detective - and sense a tension here that you might build on. I hope you continue!!Read the story now
Well - I really enjoyed this very much! The whole idea of a shared haunting really intrigues me. I thought you did a wonderful job; and I really liked the idea of hearing from the first ghost's point of view. It would be interesting to read more about these two - and the ghost-busters that infiltrate the house. I would definitely like to know their names; history; and how things work out. I think this is a great start - if you decide to go further. Thanks for sharing this!!Read the story now
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