As a writer who writes suspense for a living, you've done a great job conveying it throughout the story. I thought for how small the story was, the character were well-placed. I loved the character, Finn, who is an archaeologist that is blamed. What I felt it lacked was descriptions, though this is me personally. I thought the writing style of this story was unique and the premise of the story was fascinating. It remembered me of a classic 'who-dun-it' which I loved. Apart from the lack of descriptions, I felt that the grammar could use some work as well. Though, I do have to say, I did enjoy reading this tale and hope to read more of this author's work in the future.
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If you like classic mysteries, this story may very well be for you.
-Myria Candies (Author of Black Hollow)