Intriguing and full of potential
I like it how you write the main character's feelings about losing her girlfriend, I think you did a great job with that. And I think the necromancy gift is such an interesting topic for a story. I also really liked the fact that you're narrating in present tense; I know for personal experience that it can be hard.
I think this had great potential. I would definetely continue reading the next chapters. You have a couple of mistakes; grammar or sentences that just sound weird to me, but they are not frequent enough to make it un-readable. Also, I found it a little bit force, the way this William guy approached the main character, but that's just my opinion.
Keep up the good work!
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