PoisonousStarlight

I'm Maya, I'm a writer&artist, I love yaoi, cold weather, and chocolate.Don't be afraid to talk I'm open to chat or just fangirl about stuff. See you around!

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If Only

If only there was such a thing as a perfect world...I wish there was for Naruto and the gang.
I really enjoyed your reintroduction, it was sweet to read all their inner truths and confessions. I almost shed a tear reading it because you got their reactions right on point. I think it would have been great if they did have this reintroduction to begin with, who knows maybe things would have turned out different. Or maybe not?
That's the beauty of it. Anyway, I loved how simple it would have been for them all to talk to each other and the honesty you perfectly captured from them all.. Good job :)

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Good Work So Far

I really enjoyed how you crossed all the Hannibal characters from every series together, it was an interesting twist and I haven't seen it before. I'm really interested in how you will play Clarice's involvement with the duo but conflicted because I really don't know what to expect lol. Using the omega/alpha was intriguing as well, although I'm curious as to the twin's name choices, not that I don't like them I'm just curious. Overall your take on the stories is very cool and I'd very much like to see the continuation of how this will all fold out. I will also say good job on some of the vocabulary.
Only criticism I can really give is to watch your spelling, there weren't that many mistakes but just a few, and work on capitalization and punctuation use because sometimes it became confusing if a character was still speaking or stopped to have a thought.
In conclusion I hope you continue with this story because I do find it interesting. Thank you and sorry if anything I said sounded harsh.

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