R.A. MICHAELS

Nouvelle Terre

I enjoy writing short stories that I hope will entertain you. *** You can find me also on Wattpad, Dreame, Amazon, and Webnovel!

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Kevin's ghoul

This story is a supremely dark one achieved with ease. The prologue gets you the reader in the mindset that impeding doom is at all corners. No one is safe. I will say that this ghoul that is bound to Kevin in a way only to make him endure the worse forms of pain and sufferings reminded me of someone's curse.

I grew up in the Carribeans listening to stories about some families that were cursed. The women were bound to these sinister creatures at birth and if they were to ever marry, their husbands will die untimely and horribly. No matter how sweet and great they were, they will succumb to their final moments, right before the deathly embrace in pure agony. As if the invisible creature tormenting them took great pleasure in taking their time and reducing them to wimps. My story Foley explores some parts of that. I was always fearful of stories like these, being cursed just because one's family was.

It felt as if Kevin unknowingly caused the demise of his fiancée by just being, well, Kevin. As he has his very own ghoul who will kill everyone around him but him for their sick enjoyment. The plot brought me back to my youth and engulfed me in the ambiance of storytelling like it should. To scare the little infant out of me. The plot was well paced and the action scenes, the killing spree, and tactics used by the ghoul were so convincingly well-structured and delivered.

Yes as a woman, I will implore you to do more research about victims of sexual assaults. If there is no magical element explained to cause the survivor to behave as though she was not raped just few days prior to engaging in a fueled consensual sexual intercourse is a complete disregard to all victims of sexual abuse.

Victims may completely rule out sex and become fearful of anyone that gets too close for comfort unless they receive proper therapy. They will replay the incident over and over in their minds and remain fragmented by it for years. They may also become promiscuous after a long period of denial, self-blaming, shamefulness, where it's on their terms and oftentimes it's not for sexual pleasure. Fix that please.

You have a great plot again it made me go back in time. Please do read the story over and get some new set of eyes to identify and fix the minor grammatical errors and run on sentences.

Overall great job!

Cheers,

Ra!

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Amazing story!

Andy! Wow!

Great story. I read the whole thing in one seating. So thrilling. You are a great story teller. You made me feel for Sienna Reed. Please tell me there will be more. I need to know if Alessio is guilty. Either you have a vivid imagination or had a rich life experience. You have the ability to create worlds, I could actually visualize every scene as well as the characters. I do love Layla!

But there are some grammar and punctuation irregularity. Do go through it or post in Grammarly to help you edit. Some sentences are missing pronouns, prepositions and have the wrong word. You use through sometimes in the wrong context.

But overall, such a great story. Please continue to write it! I want to know about Alessio and his sister and that plastic Kiara Jones too.

Can't wait!

A fan!

R.

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A refreshing insider's look into Modern Vikings

I love everything about this premise. I love that is focusing on the MC world which co-exists if not complements the Vikings' New World Order. I love that it has not taken itself too seriously while still maintaining the Viking Lore. It is an intriguing topic and you have managed to make me fall in love with two characters in three chapters.

Just minor grammatical errors overall great plot and writing style!

I cannot wait to read some more.

Cheers,

Ra!

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The munchies...

I actually enjoyed this book more than I anticipated. I will lay out the great and not so great about the story and character development.

The not so great:

The MC is driven but too robotic. I do understand while it may be intentional but I find myself disliking him altogether. You want your readers to like your MC. Unless you are painting him as an antihero. Even so, there should be at least an attempt to make him likeable. Likeability equals more fans. For example "Deadpool".

The grammar and writing style need some editing but the main purpose of each character is clearly conveyed. There are broken sentences throughout in need of proper punctuation. Too many long paragraphs that could be better read if cut in half or add some much needed dialogues here and there.

Time and place seem to be nonexistent in more than half of the book. I keep wondering and end up having to add in my own period and location in some chapters. In order to ground myself as I was getting confused with the lack of description.

The conversations and actions taken place in this book are not deemed to be rated mature. Yes there is mild violence depicted but not to the extent of being a carnage a la Deadpool.

Please pace yourself!

The great:

I enjoyed the high concept energy behind the world building. To me it reads as a food system. I think it's an ingenious idea that can be explored further. I can definitely see this story developed into a miniseries or a comic series on Netflix.

The plot is highly original. I have never heard of superpowers obtained through ingesting different types of foods. You can do so much with this one. Quite frankly, I was getting the munchies while reading this book (:

The book cover tells the story of a gladiator gourmet which is a part of a series. So readers should already be prepared to commit. It is well done. No one should be confused about the storyline and what it may entail. The title is prominently spelled out in gold and bold. An eye catcher indeed!

Overall, this is a great premise. Keep updating it and making it better.

Kudos,

Ra!

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A romantic tale with some bites

I thoroughly enjoyed this book. I love the characters especially Jessica. There is a reason behind everything she does even before she knew what that reason was. Her friendship with Kate drives this storyline to be more than just another love story about a clumsy, unassuming girl who finds her mate. It gives it layers and her misadventures with these vamps while finding her mate makes it for a nail biting action packed story that you want to read and read again. Great pace throughout and great storytelling.

The only issue I had was grammatical errors and run on sentences.

Overall an exceptional addition to the mythology of non-humans living among us.

Cheers,

Ra

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Fantastic Storytelling

Firstly I was not expecting this story to be that exciting. It is foremost an adventure, action-packed plot. The whole time I was reading, I could visualize the scenes and that made for a greater experience as a reader. I was entertained throughout. I especially enjoyed Carr and Ma's personality traits, their relationship and their bond as it evolved toward the end of the story was commendable.

It was mysterious and surprisingly scary at times when it needed Kryston character, wow, great depiction of a villain. Some deals! But the heart of this story is the reasoning behind Carr's Odyssey. He went on a journey because he needed to retrieve his mother's wedding rings primarily. This made it such a touching and endearing even plot.

Yes Carr is definitely a rogue who fought creatures like ogres, witches, and more but his cunning is what catapulted him into a survivalist.

I also appreciate the pace of the story, I would say some of your chapters could have been cut into two as they were long and covered so much.

Overall great world building, great character development, and great storytelling!

Except for some minor grammatical errors and some editing needed, I thoroughly enjoyed this tale!

Cheers,

R.

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Extraordinary twists!!!!

A compelling topical story about the lengths conformist, tunnel vision, parents who suffer from all the "isms" would go to ensure they are raising only conforming children.

The story further explores that no matter the race or species, these highly judgmental, gender biased, and selfish parents do exist and prevail. It twisted my world because I did not expect anyone in the story to be creatures or the least be discriminated against for their lifestyles, or personalities. Nicely done!

It is essentially a love story that expands on the dynamics of family relationships. Matt and Connor meet under surreal circumstances. Matt is an open-minded sibling who loves his younger siblings to bits. No matter their preferences or lifestyle. He is a good thoughtful, caring brother to Avery and Mason. Even though, they are not of the same race, we find out later that they were humans turned vampires, Matt loves them unconditionally as far as risking his life for Mason to go save them from the "Monsters" his parents traded him in for a version of them that will be obedient and PC to flatter their impeccable vanilla image.

It is also a poetic love tale about where the protagonist found out that his mate was under his nose the whole time. The plot elements utilized in the storytelling are seamless. They help carry the story along. The characters are enticing and each had their own voice. However, I wished Jethro and Jocelyn had dialogues to learn more about them. Though, the storytelling lacks objectivity as it is only being told from Connor and Matt's POV. I recommend to re-read both chapters and give some light to Mason.

I love the built up, the foreshadowing to the action scenes. I could actually visualize it. I wanted to learn more about their world. I was impressed by the otherworldly creature element. Please keep writing this story! I want to know more.

R.

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Interesting coming of age story!

A fascinating read overall. The title says it all. As you are. No one is perfect but true friends always accept you as you are. It reminded me of a Nirvana song. Come as you are. I was expecting some elements from the lyrics indirectly. It delivered. The characters are rich and complement each other at times. The drama boiling among them makes up for great tv magic. I could definitely see this story turn into a sitcom. A slow burn until you get to know everyone and what makes them happy, and what makes them tick. I especially enjoyed the name choices of the characters. Lucifer. Wow. Bold.

My favorite character has to be Ian. He showed the most growth. Selfless and humble in spite of status and fandom. The story serves as a great commentary to the necessity and importance of friendships. A bond that can get anyone through the worst moments of their lives. The bond Ian and Mika share in the evolution of the story is the perfect arc.

As siblings, you are not required to be friends but if you experience some hardships together and become closer through it all, you form a stronger bond. A friendship, camaderie that no one can ever break. Unlike a boyfriend or girlfriend relationship which fundamentally requires a friendship first.

There is a clear voice behind this story. Friendships are precious, and they make all things possible!

We all need a friend!

Great story!

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Fuego!!!!!

🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

You were not teasing when you warned to have iced water readily available if one dared to peek. I like how each story had the potential to be their own standalone novel. They were not just cheap thrills, they were thrills you wanted to invest more time on. Good job on keeping the stories fresh and engaging.

Cheers,

R.

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Great Romantic tale with twists for days!

The Girl Who Loved Two Princes is a beautifully written romantic novel in the veins of Jane Austen and Danielle Steele books. It was both intriguing and engaging. The nuanced characters with the prince who had a similar story as the main protagonist were riveting as they forced the reader to go to bat for them. Each character has a unique voice. They were relatable even though they were royals and wealthy.

The story was enticing and enchanting. As you read the story of this 23-year-old who had never met her father during her adolescence but at 23, she is invited to meet him in his mansion. As expected, he is a douche of a duke but rather fit and his wife the duchess is unapproving of her, being born out of wedlock. However, she must concede because they need her. It keeps you wanting more. You feel privy of some royal tea that you can't seem to get enough of.

The story is well structured, and the pace flows organically. However, there were some minor grammatical errors and some paragraphs seemed to be out of order from the other platforms provided by the author to continue reading the rest of the book.

Overall, a great period romantic tale with twists for days!

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I am in love with Art

Writing this tale is giving me goose bumps. I can see the scenes play out. So in love!

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Beautifully written!

You created a world where Silas, a murderer of corrupt and hypocrites who also condemns himself for being the very same thing, a liar, but with a code, who is loved, so effortlessly. The plot is an endearing journey of a killer to his mate unbeknownst to him. Arche is well-intentioned and respected by all for his size and stature. The boy/killer, Silas/Luke is troubled, small but self-sustaining. They could not have been more of polar opposites if they tried but they are perfect for each other.

You painted the pain, and the rage so compellingly well that I could feel his pain.

I want to know more about Arche and this new clan. Will Silas/Luke accept his mate? Will he reject him?

-R

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Flawless, enticing!

Dan,

I enjoyed this story greatly, I love the character development you achieved. I knew and felt for every single character. I understood what made them tick, and made them growl. The name change to the usual monster names given by a misunderstood society was a great tool to drive the essence of the story. The plot was amazing but the story, unique. It was truly a unique depiction of a werewolf as the main character. The level of detail entrusted in each of the characters, his group of friends and families, you only want to cheer for them! Harmony is definitely a supportive town with a heroic cast like the Sheriff Ron, his beautiful wife, his twins Breena and Brody, the St Clairs and their daughter Gabby, Miles Coen and his mom, what can Dillon and his family ever fear?

-R

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Forbidden love indeed!

This story intrigues me. Are they step-siblings? Does Betty need to be exposed to more people her age? Very relevant.

I was a little confused on when Aidan or Betty was expressing their thoughts. I would identify the character expressing the thought to avoid confusion. Read the whole story and make sure it all makes sense to you, change some words as needed.

Overall, great plot.

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Wow

Such passion! I can see your direction, very well structured. You send the message through in prose!

One word: captivating!

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Engaging story!

I enjoyed it. Seven lives but they always find themselves, ultimately sacrificing oneself to save the other brother. Demons aside, it is a story about the human condition. What we are limited to do once we are loved or in love. On the same token, love also give us wings to do the unexpected, and the most difficult of things through sacrifice. Great story!

Keep writing!
R.

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