RachiieRIOT

Bristol, United Kingdom

Hello, I'm Rachel. I am a Graphic Designer in Bristol. In my spare time I dance (like ballet and tap), design, painting, cross stitch and writing.

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The story itself had great impact from start to finish. The description all the way through was clean and simple to understand. The romance and emotional connection the characters had between are so believable and that’s good writing. I was gripped an how I was taking down towards this journey and couldn’t wait for more.

Then I got to the end, it was so short on what I thought could be a dramatic story with the ex and the forever lover and I didn’t get that.
Because of how short it was, it made me think that I found someone’s diary.

Your writing is superb though, top marks for that. Keep continue on what you’re doing and can’t wait to read more.

All the best.

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Really Good

The overall outtake of the story was very well thought of, it all came together really well and it worked beautifully.

Your description of how the characters felt really got my attention and I couldn't put the book down once I started. I was gripped, it almost got to a point that I thought they would live happily ever after, but something always got in the way and that's what made it much more interesting.

The only thing that I have to say is that the POV points could be a bit more clearer, maybe it would of been better if the POV was each chapter? Ok, it may have made your chapters shorter, but I don't think it'll be a problem. I've seen from other reviews/comments that the child acted a bit more older than the age she was stated and I agree with that. I don't think it would of mattered if they met again 4 or 5 years later after she was born, it wouldn't change the story too much. A couple of grammar mistakes but easy to understand what you were implying.

Thank you for creating this and wish you all the best.

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Thank you for taking the time to write this

It must of taken you a long time and I credit you for it, putting all the hard work into this story is amazing. I thought picking up this book, it's going to be the "bad boy good girl, pretend relationship than falling in love" scenario. However, it was more than that, the plot, in general, had much more to offer with all the characters. I think what was nice that the main POV character had a deep secret too and that made it much more interesting.

That extra touch you implemented, really make this become a fantastic story.

The way the characters interacted with each other and the humour you included created a great impact.

Because of how long the story is, I had to dip in and out of it a few times, but I fell back into it really easy. The only thing I could say is, a few grammar mistakes but I completely understand what you meant, I believe some parts didn't need dialogue and just as descriptive sentences. Also, there are some parts where it got a bit too descriptive. What I mean by that is, me (as a reader) understood the situation and for it to be heavily described in detail wasn't necessary, my imagination was prepared for it.

I credit to you for the time and effort for writing this, I hope you continue in what you are doing and look forward to seeing more of your work in the future.

All the best.

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First of many reads

I originally read this on Wattpad and gave feedback on there, but I can also do that here too. I very much enjoyed the twists and turns that the story had to offer, I was gripped into the story. The characters from each POV was great and it didn't become too confusing and overwhelming. Overall it's a great story. Thank you for writing it.

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