Rachiie-Writes

Bristol, United Kingdom

Hello, I'm Rachel. I am a Graphic Designer in Bristol. In my spare time I dance (like ballet and tap), design, painting, cross-stitch and writing.

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What a wonderful way with words

My god, I forgot how much I loved poetry and how disconnected I become when I left school. The words you write are powerful, realistic and relatable. I enjoyed this very much. Interesting use of words, that I will take with me as a learning curve for writing

All the best

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Interesting

Really interesting, really liked going on the journey with Nico and facing his fears along the way. The support from Ryan and others were nice and the fact he could find someone to understand him as he is.

Little bit of confusion with dialogue but got the gist of it. Some gramma errors but it’s a nice story.

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All good

Enjoyed reading this. All good plot, quite a dark and dramatic ending, but it was exciting to see their relationship blooming.

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Caught between the decision!

Congrats on writing your story. I very much enjoyed it and I could see the potential of it. The tension and mixed emotions between the characters worked well and is almost quite relatable. I became very divided who Becca should really have chosen but I predicted how it would end and that didn't bother me. It almost come to a point that Logan got in the way and bothered me frantically.

With Becca, I felt discouraged on some of her actions, and whether she wanted to take more risks but it was done in the wrong manner. There were some parts I understood why she did it, but sometimes I fear it was too irresponsible.

Well done in all for writing a really good story. Thank you for sharing it to the world.

All the best

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Gripping

I was gripped on from the word go and finished it in one sitting.

The story itself became a rollercoaster of the good, bad and everything in-between. The way she felt from time-to-time was wonderfully described. The chemistry between the characters was fantastic and that's what made it intriguing. I'm glad you finished it off with an aftermath of it too.

The only thing I wished for was to see a longer desire to have each other, the tension they had between them to go on just a tad bit longer. There was also, some parts I would of liked to of read, like the interview, or a meeting with the doctor or the times she spent with his daughter, like if she had an instinct (in an innocent way). I wanted to be in her shoes in "real-time".

Some little mistakes but, understandable.

Thank you for taking the time to write this, and for the world to see it.

All the best.

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Really Good

The overall outtake of the story was very well thought of, it all came together really well and it worked beautifully.

Your description of how the characters felt really got my attention and I couldn't put the book down once I started. I was gripped, it almost got to a point that I thought they would live happily ever after, but something always got in the way and that's what made it much more interesting.

The only thing that I have to say is that the POV points could be a bit more clearer, maybe it would of been better if the POV was each chapter? Ok, it may have made your chapters shorter, but I don't think it'll be a problem. I've seen from other reviews/comments that the child acted a bit more older than the age she was stated and I agree with that. I don't think it would of mattered if they met again 4 or 5 years later after she was born, it wouldn't change the story too much. A couple of grammar mistakes but easy to understand what you were implying.

Thank you for creating this and wish you all the best.

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Thank you for taking the time to write this

It must of taken you a long time and I credit you for it, putting all the hard work into this story is amazing. I thought picking up this book, it's going to be the "bad boy good girl, pretend relationship than falling in love" scenario. However, it was more than that, the plot, in general, had much more to offer with all the characters. I think what was nice that the main POV character had a deep secret too and that made it much more interesting.

That extra touch you implemented, really make this become a fantastic story.

The way the characters interacted with each other and the humour you included created a great impact.

Because of how long the story is, I had to dip in and out of it a few times, but I fell back into it really easy. The only thing I could say is, a few grammar mistakes but I completely understand what you meant, I believe some parts didn't need dialogue and just as descriptive sentences. Also, there are some parts where it got a bit too descriptive. What I mean by that is, me (as a reader) understood the situation and for it to be heavily described in detail wasn't necessary, my imagination was prepared for it.

I credit to you for the time and effort for writing this, I hope you continue in what you are doing and look forward to seeing more of your work in the future.

All the best.

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First of many reads

I originally read this on Wattpad and gave feedback on there, but I can also do that here too. I very much enjoyed the twists and turns that the story had to offer, I was gripped into the story. The characters from each POV was great and it didn't become too confusing and overwhelming. Overall it's a great story. Thank you for writing it.

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What a ending

Finished in one sitting again, was very gripped.

Enjoyed the connection between the characters and got to know more of the others too.

A clever intake overall from the trilogy.

Thank you for writing them

All the best.

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Nice follow up

Straight to the next one and finished it on one sitting.

A little bit short, but all the action points were there, and they made up for it. Again the connection between the characters was great. The built-up worked and kept me gripped to it.

Can't wait to read the third one.

All the best

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1 down, 2 to go....

The story its self is gripping, and it was an easy read and flowed well. The characters, in general, worked well together, and their feeling towards each other felt very real.

It almost made me forget sometimes that he didn't really 'exist' in the living.
What made this enjoyable is the complication between makes this story very unique.

The descriptions overall and the background story from each character played well in this.

Also, quite the cliffhanger you've left it too....well played.

I've started it and I might as well finish it.

Looking forward to reading the rest.

All the best.

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