Thank you for taking the time to write this
It must of taken you a long time and I credit you for it, putting all the hard work into this story is amazing. I thought picking up this book, it's going to be the "bad boy good girl, pretend relationship than falling in love" scenario. However, it was more than that, the plot, in general, had much more to offer with all the characters. I think what was nice that the main POV character had a deep secret too and that made it much more interesting.
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That extra touch you implemented, really make this become a fantastic story.
The way the characters interacted with each other and the humour you included created a great impact.
Because of how long the story is, I had to dip in and out of it a few times, but I fell back into it really easy. The only thing I could say is, a few grammar mistakes but I completely understand what you meant, I believe some parts didn't need dialogue and just as descriptive sentences. Also, there are some parts where it got a bit too descriptive. What I mean by that is, me (as a reader) understood the situation and for it to be heavily described in detail wasn't necessary, my imagination was prepared for it.
I credit to you for the time and effort for writing this, I hope you continue in what you are doing and look forward to seeing more of your work in the future.
All the best.