Thomas Jones

Chicago Illinois United States

I am a lover of animals especially cats and horses! I write stories centered around fantasy and science fiction. My hobbies include Horseback riding, golf, scuba diving and flying.

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Intriguing Chapter!

I liked how this chapter is setting the stage for what will follow in future chapters. In the last part of the chapter we begin to see what the fate of those girls that were swept out to see might have been, now will the return? Only future chapters will tell! Liked the use of descriptions and details to set the scene in my mind as I read, I would caution though, about making people, especially the girls seem to perfect. Otherwise very well done!

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