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Great story! I enjoyed your writing style, prose, and story telling. You should look at your use of semicolons; the sections of the sentences which follow your semicolons do not represent complete sentences. Also, there are a few places where you have used a comma to emphasize the the end of a sentence, which seem excessive. I love using commas and semicolons myself, but likely overuse them as well.
Just food for thought.
Excellent story though, I enjoyed it and you got my vote.
Although I found that neither the topic nor the plot drew me in (personal taste), I found the writing to be compelling, even spellbinding. The author has beautiful prose and is a skilled story telling. If for no other reason, I recommend you read this story for the writing.Read the story now
Beautiful and heart wrenching
I try to avoid emotionally wrenching books, but this story this captivating. My eyes were glossed the entire time, my heart ached, and I could not stop reading. The author is a fantastic story teller and her story will tug at your heart strings. I enjoyed her writing very much.Read the story now
Well written and compelling
Great job WonderingHonestly,
I really enjoyed your work. Great story--the telling and the style. You really painted scenes well; I was able to see your story in my mind's eye.
I won't be going to the cellar for a month. Also, I know an Alice, and now I won't ever be able to look at them the same way either.