Rose 🌹

Hot

Very steamy and sexy book for sure! While I feel this story is a little cliche, I appreciated seeing that the main character (Lauralie) is a strong female character. That is something different from the other Mafia stories that I've read. I understand that the story is continuing, however, I would like to see more emphasis on the character's backstories, to see how they came to be.

I also just noticed that you have fixed a lot of your grammar and wording in sentences, so kudos to you for doing that! The description has also improved and I thought it was easy to read. I had noticed a few grammar and wording errors, however, that's normal and they don't draw away from the story.

Overall it's a great book, with very interesting characters, and I can't wait to read what comes next!

Pulls you in from the start

I love it when books jump straight into the story and you were able to wonderfully do that. It's a very well-written story that immediately pulls you in. You are introduced to a strong MC who is both rational and emotional, making her son one of her weaknesses (and assuming her only one). In her tough how will she decide rationally or emotionally? This causes some complexity in the character, and the reader can't anticipate what she will do next. With that being said it makes us readers want to read about her even more. I want to know more about her!

This book has very long chapters ranging from 2,000 to 3,000 words per chapter, which is a lot and sometimes hard to follow, but it's necessary for this story because it helps the reader grasp the setting.

This is a very impressive story, that is descriptive and smoothly written. There are only three chapters posted and as much as I would wish you would post more, I also appreciate you taking the time to thoroughly write this story! I can't wait to see what you do with it!

Very well written

While I haven't read the entire story, I would have to say that it is a very well-written and though the out story. Very interesting storytelling and something I haven't read before, but that's a good thing! I would say there are times were I was a bit confused and would have to re-read parts, but take that with a grain of salt because I have a very short attention span. Very descriptive and engaging, the characters very well thought out and so is the story. Amazing job!

A Good Start!

I love the idea of the story. I like how each character is different from one another. What I thought was really cool was the transition in the first chapter, you should definitely continue to use that.
For the most part, I understand the storyline and you're idea for this story. I do have a few questions about certain characters' relationships with one another, but the book is at an early stage, so I know they would eventually be answered.
Another thing is the grammar is a little bit rough. I recommend Grammarly! It's very helpful and time-saving!
Overall I love this story and can't wait to continue to read it! Great job!

Intriguing

I love how easy it is to follow the story. It's very well thought out! Good work! I would love to read the other books that you have written as well!