The beggining of the story was very efficient in transporting me right to the teens halloween movies and parties. After that, the stories goes on very light hearted all the way. I really enjoyed it overrall! It is a "horror story" worth telling all our kids.
Unexpected and Brutal
I like stories that are unexpected, and somehow brutal. Your story has both. Although it begins with the classical "misterious underdog facing a well know master", there is a "plot twist" well justified by the character's past.
Not a single paragraph or sentence was there just to fill the story, you were direct and quick, just like a sword (and gun) fight should be. I would like to see more of this stranger.
The most realistic werewolf I've ever met
The story has a very original concept and take out "monsters" out of the pedestral that we always put them. I like how you fit supernatural subjects in the everyday reality. Although the objective of the story was to present the werewolf itself, I was expecting more interaction with the vampire.
There is one small typo in "Georgina was older than school".
Very good sory overall
I really like when a fantasy story is not just a fantasy story. Your story has a strong message and relates to everyday human feellings. It is easy to transform the elements of the story in subjects of our lives. That is why is such a rich story.
However, I felt that all sentences were very short and abrupt, but that is a totally personal opinion.
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