Keep Your Promises.....
The story of two sisters with unexpected turns are the things that I loved the most in this Story. The emotions, sadness, determination of finding the truth with some unique ideas made the story enjoyable. Scarlett is an interesting character, and her back story is interesting either. Other characters played their role good as well. This story has a lot of potentials, to be honest. Only needs some polishing and fixes in writing style and also in grammar part as well. The writing style is like a big room where the author has a chance to attract the readers with many ways he wants. So, focusing on writing style is a must for a writer. Otherwise, it can distract readers and often discourages to read the story. Here are few things I'd like to say about your writing style. It looks right from the starting point. But the biggest problems are over-description, long paragraphs, and repetitive sentences. They are the red points of the story and main obstacles that don't let your story become a better one. Fixing them will make your story even more enjoyable. the detailed description is down below the comment section (Wanting to avoid spoilers) :)
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