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Really good premise

This is one of those diamonds in the rough you can find on this site. I enjoyed both the detail in the writing and the characters themselves. We especially found out a lot in this latest chapter, which makes the reader even more invested in finding out how this book ends.

The dialogue was realistic and witty, which I loved, and the MC is relatable. Really good read and idea.

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Sweet romance

This was a sweet book with enough action in it to keep things interesting. I like the characters and the evolving of the MC once she finds out the secret about herself and her family.

There were some mistakes I noticed, mainly words that had been typed out wrong, like "buffer" instead of "buffet." The ending felt a bit abrupt, but that may have just been me.

Overall, it was well put together and a good werewolf story with romance and excitement.

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Enjoyable start

I really liked the diversity in this, from the characters to the setting. It's an exciting dive into a futuristic world with mystery and intrigue in the form of possible chemical attacks. I like where this is heading and am intrigued to see the continued growth between Valen and Don.

I always love banter, and what we get between Valen and Orya is on point. And she's a friend who will point out Valen's weaknesses and tell him when he's wrong, which is important.

So far, it's been a very entertaining and wholesome read.

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Good so far

There's only two chapters and so much to review, but it is good so far. I like the snippets of backstory we get and are starting to get a sense of who the main character is and the stakes of this latest job.

The opening chapter gave us a nice taste of her skills and a little action to get us excited for what's to come.

I think this'll turn into a real page-turner once it's complete.

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Dark and gripping

This is not my usual choice of reading material, but the spookiness of it was cool. It was fast-paced and kept you on your toes about what would happen to each character.

I liked the descriptions and the complicated relationships between the kids that added to the suspense and made you wonder if we would get a happy ending or not.

It's a good, different read that kept me wondering just how everything was going to work out.

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Dark and gritty

This is a dark read, but the way it's written is compelling. The mystery behind both MCs keeps you reading to see what it is, and the description of the dream in the latest chapter is vivid. There's obvious chemistry between the MCs, but the same mystery we're trying to find out is holding one of them back, and it makes it even more important to find out what could be so powerful in their lives.

There were some instances of missing commas and misspellings. "Bowl" instead of "bow," for instance. Otherwise, I am really enjoying where this is going. It'll be intriguing to see if the unknowns will actually hamper any type of romantic relationship or not.

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Sucked in right away

I'm rather jealous of this writing style because there's something about it that leaves the characters open in a sort of raw and vulnerable way. For some reason, it makes me feel more connected with the people in this book, so bravo for that.

I really have nothing critical to say about this. I was intrigued from the start, and it just keeps getting better and better. The tragic elements are written in such a lovely way that I honestly don't know how the author does it. I will definitely be waiting on updates.

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A good plot for a thriller

I like the plot and the way this book is going. There are signs that the author includes to make us suspect there definitely is something wrong with the family and that they're hiding something.

There were some issues with grammar and misspellings, but I suspect English is not the author's native language, so I'm not putting a whole lot of emphasis on it. The point of the book gets across, and that's what is important.

I like the thriller aspect of this and think it has potential to be really creepy once the family's secret is finally revealed.

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A cute beginning and hilarious MCs

The cat is adorable, and it definitely helps for the author to signal when each MC is talking so we don't get confused. It would be interesting for a cat to get a job and drool over a boss though . . .
The human MC is funny and has personality for days. The dialogue's cute and gives us a sense of the atmosphere in the job site.

There were some grammatical errors, mostly when it came to dialogue. Punctuation needs to go inside of the quotations, and unless the sentence inside the quotes is finished or there's a proper noun right after, any words following the quotes should be lower case.

I like where this is going, and leaving out the initial meeting between the MC and the boss really makes us curious as to what happened to make her all flustered.

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What a start!

Immediately, this book gets you in the the heartstrings. I like how the character dysfunctions are weaved together with the plot to create something that's a little more raw and natural in comparison to something in Hollywood, for example. I thought the pace was well executed, and a lot of clipped sentences added to the urgency of the situation at hand.

There were only a few instances where it looked like some editing had been done and something not deleted that should have been. I also noticed a mixed pronoun and an altered name (Amberson instead of Amberley). But again, it was very minor, and overall well written.

It always interests me to see different styles of writing, and I really liked the briskness to this. For me, it just added to the goings-on and was matter of fact where it needed to be, then longer and more drawn out where emotions and descriptions took precedence.

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Good base to start

The bare bones of this has potential. I like the characters, their personalities, and how they interact with each other. I even liked the surprising little introduction we get to something supernatural and/or fantastical which adds even more to the plot.

That said, there are many grammatical and spelling issues around, but polishing these up will greatly enhance the story. There were instances of going back and forth between characters, times, and settings that gave me a little whiplash. Focusing on your descriptions and making sure the reader can tell the difference in who, where, and when you're talking about will orient them better and enhance the experience even more.

Again, this has a great base with which to work from. It just needs a little polishing and some added explanation to really make it pop.

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Terrific start!

This was a fantastic beginning. The way the words weave the scenes together is a real treat to read. You get an immediate sense of the gravity of the situation to begin with, and then something unexpected to leave you wondering just what was discovered and how it's going to play out later.

I was thrilled to read this, and I think it could be one of the great fantasy books of today.

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Really intriguing start

This is a good start to what I'm sure will be an interesting book. The characters and their back stories are given in little snippets throughout to give the reader an idea of how they all fit together and understand their feelings when dealing with current events.

There were a few spelling issues, but mostly grammatical. The biggest was after dialogue. Always lower case after dialogue. For example: "I can't believe it!" said Suzie.
Instead of: "I can't believe it!" Said Suzie.

There were also a few places where I was a little lost when jumping back and forth in time or between characters. Some sort of break will help with this.

Still, I really like where this book is going and how the emotions and different personalities of the characters are captured.

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An Intriguing Start

I very much enjoyed everything in this first chapter from the descriptions of the environment to the people. The dialogue was believable, and the interactions between the characters was pretty spot on. I can tell this is going to be a good book whenever it's finished.

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Nice thriller

I enjoyed all the twists and turns in this, and the ending was unexpected. Everything was a nice lead up to the surprising ending. I liked the evolution of the characters and how we learned more with each chapter.

I personally felt it was a little quick for the main character to be thinking dark thoughts with such gusto. I get the momentary thinking and the high you would get from it, but I think committing to something like that would take a little more time than was in this story. There were some grammatical errors I spotted.

All in all, this was definitely a nice thriller, and I wasn't able to predict what was happening, nor how secondary characters would react.

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Good read

Overall, I enjoyed this story. The characters each had their own personalities for good development. It had a good flow and the pace was a good clip.

There were some small technical issues like grammar, some misspellings, mismatched names, and the quotation marks tended to not always be around dialogue. I had mixed feelings about the differing points of view, but because they were separated the way they were, there wasn't any confusion.

I would also suggest a brief description of the main characters closer to the beginning. They did come later, but until then, we were left to guess for the most part.

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Quite the exciting tale

I was very pleasantly surprised with the turn of events in this. I expected a whole other outcome than what the author gave us, and it ramped up the whole experience. I like how the main character is not one-track minded, especially when it comes to her feelings. Like in real life, there can be more than one (potential) love interest, and some exploring must be done both internally and without.

That said, there were some issues with grammar and a repeat of words. For example, "I want my life back. I can't waste my life on this." The repetition of "life" takes a little of the magic away, so I highly recommend synonyms in those spots.

Especially earlier in the book, some descriptions went a little over the top, and I should know, because I've had criticism for the same thing. So a little paring down will work wonders.

However, I absolutely recommend this to anyone because of the turn this took and the renewed interest I felt when it did. Looking forward to the continuation!

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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Enjoyable read

I like the different concept of bringing in island life rather than having a story on the main land in whatever world fantasy can dream up. For the most part, I had an easy time reading and keeping up with characters. Descriptions could bounce between being too much and too little, but I was able to keep up with what they were describing.

There are a lot of run-on sentences and word duplication in this. For example, "I fought for my life, and I didn't want to lose my life." There were instances like that throughout that could be improved with synonyms.

Grammar wasn't terrible, but there were some comma-happy moments where the sentence was broken up too much and made it choppy.

The last thing is I was a little confused about the sudden arrival of the heroes. I wasn't quite sure how they got there, other than their initial introduction in another part of the story.

All in all, it was a pretty enjoyable read, and once the rough bits are smoothed out, it will be even better.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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An interesting and frightening recount

There isn't much I can say since this is a story told by another, not from the author's own mind. It could have done with less capitalizing of the people and things had by the children, and explanations to flesh out the story for people unfamiliar with the words would be helpful.

A little bit of extra punctuation is needed as well to make this flow even better, but overall, since this is a witness account, it's a good story to have told.

- Author of Hollow's Charge

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A Captivating Tale

This was a different take on fantasy from the very beginning, and it definitely worked. The descriptions were lovely, and the characters were knowingly different from the other. The writing style had a nice flow, and emotions were written well.

There was a slight lag in the pace as we near the middle of the story, but it does pick up eventually, and we are given even more to experience and think about as the story unfolds. The grammar and punctuation were nice in this, which was refreshing to see.

The only thing I was a little hesitant on was the betrayal scene. It seemed a bit abrupt with one character turning a complete 180 during this. It sort of left me questioning the necessity of it. I will have more in the comment section as I don't wish to leave any spoilers in the review.

Overall, this was a completely enjoyable book, and I wholeheartedly recommend it for anyone to read.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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Very good spy novel!

I thoroughly enjoyed this book! The plot started a little slow, and the pace wasn't as quick in the beginning, but once things get going, it's hard to put this down. There's action, mystery, humor, and the characters are fleshed out well.

This could use some work with spelling and grammar. Having a beta reader or a proofreader go over this would improve it greatly, and the book will be that much better.

I will watch for updates from this author and recommend this to anyone who wants a good read.

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Interesting Concept

The descriptions of the characters and places were OK in that you could tell what was being talked about, and each character had their own personality to set them apart. I had a feeling before the explanation at the end that this was based off and/or inspired by anime.

The plot was sort of all over the place. The beginning was a little slow and because of the long chapters, I felt like a needed a break between each of them before I continued. If these were shortened, I believe it would help ease the flow for the readers and make them want to go to the next chapter right away.

Another thing was I wasn't sure this could even be considered a fantasy until the arrival of the faeries. Without them, this could be considered an action/sci fi book with all its bionic and warring content.

The love triangle was an interesting touch, but switching back and forth between those struggles and the random missions the main character was sent on could get confusing and a little description heavy.

There were some missing words I found here and there, and greater emphasis could be placed on grammar and punctuation, however these are easy fixes.

All in all, it wasn't a bad start. I couldn't give it higher than three stars because of the confusion I felt and the long chapters. I do hope this feedback helps in the future and I wish the best for the author!

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Nice Start

From what I read, the story does have an interesting plot. The beginning was a little confusing on where it all fit, and it seemed a little abrupt at how all the characters met.

As readers, we seem to know a little more about the other characters than the main guy. It's not clear who he is, though that could be the whole premise, in which case it leaves the reader interested to learn.

The style of writing is different, as well as in the narration and introduction of everyone. It was a nice read altogether, and I'd be interested to know where it goes from here.

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Very imaginative

I like the characters in this. They each have distinct personalities and sometimes even clash with one another. The fantastical elements and villains come from a great imagination.

My few gripes are that the pace was a little quick for me. Sometimes scenes would give me whiplash going back and forth with no warning or change in the font to suggest it's happening. This would also benefit from more spacing between dialogue, or else it sort of all runs together and you lose track of who is speaking.

Despite this, I have enjoyed the book so far.

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Really creative!

I enjoyed this new world the author built off of ours, and it'll be fun to see how they operate in the next book. All the characters were written well, and I particularly liked some of the descriptions using words and phrases not usually seen.

I understand English is not the first language of this author, so I'm not bothered by the grammar. Actually, it was very good for the most part.

The only thing I will say I noticed is there was an enormous amount of repeat with hair and eye color. I understand it was probably to differentiate the characters without using too many pronouns, but I would suggest cutting down on them just a little bit.

Really, this is a fantastic world with lots of conflict and questions to keep us reading to figure out what will happen next, and there's plenty of intrigue with the supernatural element.

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Fun and exciting read

The writing is well done, and descriptions not overused or too lengthy. I really like the MC's personality, and both the maturity and rationality is a really nice touch compared to so many other naively written book characters. The banter between him and his sister is fun and realistic as well.

This twist on a simple trope makes it all the more exciting to see how it'll play out in the end.

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Loved the magic

I really liked the descriptions of the magic in this, and later on it gave me a sort of Harry Potter vibe once the MC was in school. All the different goals and conflicts make an almost dizzying array of characters and things to keep track of.

There were some places where commas were needed and some place names were capped in one paragraph and not in another.

I can't gripe too much though because I really liked the imagination that went into this. It was a great, action-packed read.

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A fun read

I'm a sucker for banter between characters, and there's a lot of good stuff in this. It reminded me of reading Louis L'Amour back in the day, and I missed having those gun battles and adventures in my mind. I like a good Western sometimes, and this checked all the boxes of what I would expect.

There were some instances where I would recommend more commas, but that was mainly what I saw for grammar changes.

I liked this so far, and I'm happy to read something different than werewolves once in a while.

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Good Start

I did like this, and I agree with some other reviews that it's hard yet rewarding to create characters that can rub readers the wrong way. That's good writing when you can make us dislike someone. Even better if it turns out he becomes redeemed later on.

I also had a few issues with losing my place in the book sometimes, especially around the various dreams. Something else is needed to give us a definitive cue when one scene is changing to another.

All in all, I think this was a good excerpt, and it leaves us with questions that we'd like to have answered.

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Powerful writing

The way the author writes makes reading this smooth and flawless. It's an important subject woven into a piece of fiction to help make it relatable and drive it home for people (like me) who have no experience with this concept other than what I've read in news articles. I'm drawn to all the characters, and everything feels very realistic.

The writing itself is very well done, and there's just enough description to give the reader a good idea of what we should be imagining. I'm looking forward to what I predict will be a very sweet romance in this.

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Very good book

I like all the characters in this, and the imagination is phenomenal. For the most part, it has good pacing, and there are a lot of conflicts and twists to keep readers intrigued.

The grammar needs some work, and sometimes a lack of punctuation around dialogue can make it a little confusing as to if it is dialogue or narration we're reading.

Other than that, I really enjoyed reading this and seeing the development of the characters, especially the love triangle with the MC.

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Good story and conflict

The pace of this and the relationships are good. There was realistic conflict between the characters and internally to bring some depth to the book.

There were places where some commas were needed and a few misspellings. There was also a change from first person to third at one point. In the first chapter especially, it jumped around a little bit without any sort of break, so that was a little confusing.

It's a good beginning with what I'm glad to see are the makings of a healthy relationship, which is important to represent in all forms of entertainment.

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Very impressed

This is one of the best books I've read on this app. The descriptions are all fresh and new, dialogue is well thought out and used to not only further the book but help readers understand what's going on as well. I do love some good banter, and we got it with this.

My only issue would be grammar such as not enough commas and some misspellings. Once these are fixed, this will be an epic piece of work.

I really enjoyed this so far and love all the different perspectives and clashes between the characters.

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A good middle school read

The MC and the other characters do have the personalities and dialogue I would expect from a YA book, so I think that's on point. The various ways the kids are able to get to this different dimension and how their bodies changes in each one is an interesting take.

There were some grammatical things I noticed, mainly with some extra commas and dialogue. There were a couple of misspellings as well, but a solid proofreading will improve this book tremendously.

All in all, it is an interesting book, and I like some of the plot twists we get around characters we weren't quite expecting to have significant roles.

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An intriguing intro

I liked how we were thrown into the MC's world in the first chapter and get some immediate mystery and suspense with the sudden arrival of strangers and a surprise reunion.

Grammatically, it was a little comma heavy, and there was at least one misspelling I saw; "His" instead of "hit." It might look a little neater to have quotations around dialogue as well.

In the second chapter, the pace and descriptions were still good, but I was left feeling like the MC accepted things too quickly and with almost no protest. Things turned on their head in an instant, and it felt like he just went along with it. I would have expected some sort of pushback and demands to know what was going on.

Overall, I really liked the start, and it already seems like it's going in an interesting direction.

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Entertaining

There is a ton of imagination in this book, and I liked to see the differences in all the characters. There's real growth to the main character, and there's really no way to predict what the author is going to write next.

I noticed some missing words, misspellings, and the like, but nothing that distracted much from the reading.

There was a lot of action and some romance in here, and we keep learning new things about the world as it unfolds. All in all, I enjoyed the read.

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A little hard to get through

I can kind of see where this book is going based on what I've read so far, but it was sort of difficult. I agree with other reviews about how it would be very helpful to have more spacing in paragraphs, more attention to grammatical errors, and especially quotation marks when there are different speakers. Also, I would probably recommend not posting chapters if they're not complete. Because of the editing notes in some of them, I almost didn't go to the end to see if there was anything actually written.

There is potential in everything, and I really think that with the help of a professional or even a friend or family member, it could get a little more fleshing out and focus on the plot, how the character got to where she is, and what's happening. I was feeling confused by it all, so I would highly recommend someone who knows what you're trying to write about to look at the book.

I look forward to seeing how the finished product turns out, and best of luck.

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Very Interested in Continuing

I am in love with the chemistry between the MCs. It's funny, sweet, sexy, and intriguing. I even learned a little bit for interactions in my own attempt at a M/M, so I'm grateful for that.

From the dialogue to the slow-building relationship between the two, it's all very believable and delightfully charming.

I am definitely looking forward to more and highly recommend to anyone who enjoys this genre.

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Very Imaginative

I liked the imagination and creativity in this book. The characters were diverse in their personalities, and the dialogue was believable.

There were some grammar and spelling issues, but it's a good book all around. There were some pleasant twists I didn't expect, especially at the end.

This was a fun read overall, and I'd recommend it to any fantasy reader.

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Gripping Horror

I couldn't anticipate where this was going, and I loved that. It truly is a horror story, and it'll be interesting to see how the rest of it develops. Communication between the adult and child characters was done well. The child doesn't sound too old for her age, and she keeps a sort of juvenile outlook on the world.

There were some mismatched names and quotes and a lot of extra commas, but the actual writing was good. I enjoy that the author is keeping us guessing about the mother and her mental state.

I enjoyed this book, and it definitely lives up to its genre.

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Bittersweet to sweet

This was a good start, though the pace was very quick. There wasn't much explanation of the world, the characters, or the various cultures. You get just enough for the moment but not much more info.

Still, I like the characters and how the plot goes.

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What a read!

This is a great read straight from the beginning. The stage is set, and not long after, we get to the strangeness that lurks around the corner for the main character.

The entrance and the portrayal once things get going was so different, and it was interesting to see the instant changes between the worlds.

There were just a few instances of misspellings, but they hardly detracted from the book.

This is definitely worth a read.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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Another great work

I think I liked this one even more than the first in the series. The writing style is so unique and the descriptions so well put together that everything is easy to picture. The characters are spunky and lively, and the author connects them all in sometimes hilarious ways.

This is definitely one of the most imaginative books I've read, and I very much enjoyed it from beginning to end.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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Very intriguing

The beginning was certainly different, and the plot moves relatively quickly, but it doesn't seem to be too fast for me. The descriptions of the characters, actions, and places are very unique, and there is nothing ordinary or mundane about what I have read so far.

Reading "I" instead of "me" does take some getting used to in the role of the main character since I haven't seen the like in any other book.

I definitely recommend this to anyone who enjoys horror and the creepiness that comes out so well in this book.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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Highly emotional

From the little I've read, I can tell this will be a heart-wrenching, emotional roller coaster. It's likely to be a novel that lets us look at life differently and be grateful for what we have for as long as we have it.

The emotions, descriptions, and characters are believable and executed very well. It's a novel I'm willing to follow, and I'm definitely interested to see what the author has in store for us down the road.

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Very different!

I was impressed by the new concept of this novel! It's like nothing I've read before, and it's like a breath of fresh air. The characters are varied and interesting, and even when we think we're at the end, there's more info and characters to keep our curiosity going. The descriptions are lovely, and you get to experience everything with the Guardians.

Highly recommended read!

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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Wow

This was truly a unique and remarkable work. Everything and everyone is complete in their description, and the detail is clever and very well done. There almost seems no clear-cut personality to the characters, and so we're left to wonder what they might do when faced with the various challenges.

It's a refreshing tale that is highly recommended.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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A good mystery

There's definitely mystery that makes a reader wonder what's going on and if any of the characters are involved in the strange happenings. We get a little bit of background with some of the characters, though not much. However, the book is not finished yet, so more has yet to be revealed.

There were some spots where grammar could be improved on, and if seemed like there were some words used that were not necessarily reflecting what the author was trying to convey. Also, there were a lot of "Ums" used in the dialogue, and that was a bit distracting. Even though these are all teenagers, I think the dialogue could be played with a little.

It's definitely a strong start, and it can only get better from here.

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OK plot

I think the plot was the best part of this story. It could be a little laggy at times and then jump weeks ahead in others, so there was a lot to follow. It was a little confusing as well with the last names, Mr. This and Mrs. That. I'm not sure there was quite enough description to separate them in our minds.

I do agree that you should seek either a proofreader or a website like Grammarly to improve your writing. This will be beneficial for your book and readers so they aren't trying to interpret what you're saying.

There were parts that confused me, especially when talking about the year of the car crash. I believe you said it was in the 1800s, which obviously automobiles were not around then, so I do suggest going back and making sure everything agrees with one another.

All in all, a good base that needs some improvement to be a great book. Good luck!

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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A dark and intriguing tale

I was pleasantly surprised by the way the supernatural is weaved into the world, sometimes clashing with humans in ways they do not understand or even comprehend. The beginning was a great hook, and everything was explained in due time. The mystery behind everything is unraveled in a nice, flowing way, and it sets a good pace.

The narration threw me off a little as the first-person narrator seems to be omnipotent, which is not something I've seen before. If that was the intention, then it was pulled off without a hitch.

A once-over would do this book good to fix some missing words here and there as well as some other grammar issues.

It was a good story with memorable characters and descriptions to the people and places starring in it, and I would recommend it to anyone who wishes a thrilling read. .

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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A great adventure!

I loved this book. It was raw and real, and you got to connect on a personal level with the characters. There was a great cast, and the reader really got to see growth from them throughout. There was even a great cast of supporting characters to help guide the readers through the goings-on in other parts of this world, and it really brought everything together.

The detail was great and the actions and reactions were believable and well written, even down to the varied speech reflecting each character's education level and from where they hailed.

A once-over might not be a bad idea since there were some parts where you could tell two ideas came together about the right word or phrase, and then both ended up on the page. This is an easy fix, and it'll make this even sharper.

All in all, I absolutely recommend this to fantasy lovers!

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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A great sequel for Emily Tual

The second book in this series goes into greater detail behind the motivation of the Black Hand and why Emily is so important. It's interesting that there comes int light yet another who could have taken Emily's place, and so the reader is left wondering what the author would do with this new character.

There were still similar issues in this book as there were in the last. I would recommend the author look into how to punctuate conversations. There were some missing words here and there, and also some parts where ideas clashed as to which word was the right one to put.

I liked the detail we got in this book, and the pace was kept throughout the entirety, I'm looking forward to reading the next book.

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An intriguing start

From this one chapter, there's no true way to tell where this story is going, though we get a hint of something at the end that piques the curiosity. I can't comment much on the plot since there isn't much to go on at this stage, but it is a promising start.

The blurb itself was a bit redundant with the opening phrase "Among the planets." Perhaps running some of these sentences together or even eliminating a few would make for a better hook for readers. There were some grammar issues and places where names and titles could be capitalized, but these are easy fixes.

I liked much of the description. We get a sense of people and what the main character sees and experiences.

Once there are more chapters out, this has the potential to be an enjoyable read.

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Needs some fleshing

There's a good plot here that could be played with a little. I agree with others who have said that there is a whole host of repetition, grammar and punctuation need to be worked on, and that only describing someone as "Mr. Tual" or "The man with the German accent" can make your reader's eyes cross a little.

For grammar, there were misspelled or misplaced words, but the biggest one for me is that every time you write in quotes, you use a comma inside the quotes before identifying the speaker, unless it's a question.

Example. "I was asking how you were," Mandy said.
VS.
"How are you?" Mandy asked.
When a quote is followed by he/she/it, they do not need to be capitalized.

Fleshing out your descriptions, working on grammar/punctuation, and learning when and where to reveal your bad guys and/or plot twists will improve this dramatically.

I wish you luck on this and other ventures.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

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Great Ride!

This was a great book from beginning to end. So many characters can be overwhelming at first, but stick with it and you're able to work out who's who. The author did well with drip-feeding info and surprising me with twists I didn't guess. The ending was fulfilling and didn't leave anything hanging.

The description and detail was enthralling in this, and there was no doubt as to who or what was being discussed.

I highly recommend this book to anyone wanting a thriller that will leave you guessing till the very end.

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Enjoyable read

I liked the way emotions were captured in this book. There were vivid descriptions of everything, especially the dreams. The ending brought a nice twist that nevertheless left it bittersweet.

There were some issues with misspellings and grammar, but these did not seem to distract much from the book. The writing style was clear, and the dialogue believable.

Overall, I enjoyed this book and the interesting way it all turned out.

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