Saffhira

Great story!

This was an intriguing, thought-provoking book that allowed us a chance to see how one person (or version) could have such a profound effect on the lives of so many people.

In describing the criminal aspect, it was almost like reading an episode of CSI, where everything is explained in due time and in a way that is understandable without being too dumbed down.

I enjoyed every aspect of this book and recommend it to anyone who likes this sort of scifi/metaphysical take on life and the possibilities that could exist.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

Nice Start

From what I read, the story does have an interesting plot. The beginning was a little confusing on where it all fit, and it seemed a little abrupt at how all the characters met.

As readers, we seem to know a little more about the other characters than the main guy. It's not clear who he is, though that could be the whole premise, in which case it leaves the reader interested to learn.

The style of writing is different, as well as in the narration and introduction of everyone. It was a nice read altogether, and I'd be interested to know where it goes from here.

Very good spy novel!

I thoroughly enjoyed this book! The plot started a little slow, and the pace wasn't as quick in the beginning, but once things get going, it's hard to put this down. There's action, mystery, humor, and the characters are fleshed out well.

This could use some work with spelling and grammar. Having a beta reader or a proofreader go over this would improve it greatly, and the book will be that much better.

I will watch for updates from this author and recommend this to anyone who wants a good read.

Full of detail

The one thing I can definitely say is that this book is full of description. It's almost lyrical and poetic in the way we're allowed to see the people and surroundings. The plot was fed through dialogue where we gradually got to see the connection between the two prominent characters.

There were some instances of switched words, missing words, misspellings, and places where the author was a little comma happy. A quick polish would be useful.

While the author had a fantastic grip on adjectives to describe everything, I do believe there were a handful of words that were used over and over again. If some synonyms were thrown in, it would render the book less redundant. I couldn't help but start looking for these words every time I saw them just because there were so many instances.

Overall, this was a great piece that could use a bit of honing to make it incredible.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

A dark and intriguing tale

I was pleasantly surprised by the way the supernatural is weaved into the world, sometimes clashing with humans in ways they do not understand or even comprehend. The beginning was a great hook, and everything was explained in due time. The mystery behind everything is unraveled in a nice, flowing way, and it sets a good pace.

The narration threw me off a little as the first-person narrator seems to be omnipotent, which is not something I've seen before. If that was the intention, then it was pulled off without a hitch.

A once-over would do this book good to fix some missing words here and there as well as some other grammar issues.

It was a good story with memorable characters and descriptions to the people and places starring in it, and I would recommend it to anyone who wishes a thrilling read. .

-Author of Hollow's Charge

Very unique and wonderful poetry

Your poems are a myriad of simple and singular language woven together to evoke thoughts and images in our minds. It was greatly done, and I really enjoyed it. Much of these words I had never heard before, so it was sort of a lesson while reading as well. It's always nice to discover new things, especially about our own language that we just don't while in school.

Definitely recommended for anyone who enjoys this sort of airy and deep prose.

A great adventure!

I loved this book. It was raw and real, and you got to connect on a personal level with the characters. There was a great cast, and the reader really got to see growth from them throughout. There was even a great cast of supporting characters to help guide the readers through the goings-on in other parts of this world, and it really brought everything together.

The detail was great and the actions and reactions were believable and well written, even down to the varied speech reflecting each character's education level and from where they hailed.

A once-over might not be a bad idea since there were some parts where you could tell two ideas came together about the right word or phrase, and then both ended up on the page. This is an easy fix, and it'll make this even sharper.

All in all, I absolutely recommend this to fantasy lovers!

-Author of Hollow's Charge

An enjoyable beginning

I was hesitant at first by the two different points of view in every chapter, but I've come to like the conversational tone that opens them. The descriptions are short, succinct, and get to the point to bring you a clear picture of the places and characters in them. It is fast-paced, and the reader needs to really pay attention to the names of people and gangs thrown out there to keep everyone in place.

There were some grammar issues, words that needed to be capitalized and some that were missing letters. There was also some repetition when it came to the assassin's name that could be adjusted as well.

I think as a package, this book has great potential. It's intriguing and gripping in all the right parts.

A great sequel for Emily Tual

The second book in this series goes into greater detail behind the motivation of the Black Hand and why Emily is so important. It's interesting that there comes int light yet another who could have taken Emily's place, and so the reader is left wondering what the author would do with this new character.

There were still similar issues in this book as there were in the last. I would recommend the author look into how to punctuate conversations. There were some missing words here and there, and also some parts where ideas clashed as to which word was the right one to put.

I liked the detail we got in this book, and the pace was kept throughout the entirety, I'm looking forward to reading the next book.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

An intriguing start

From this one chapter, there's no true way to tell where this story is going, though we get a hint of something at the end that piques the curiosity. I can't comment much on the plot since there isn't much to go on at this stage, but it is a promising start.

The blurb itself was a bit redundant with the opening phrase "Among the planets." Perhaps running some of these sentences together or even eliminating a few would make for a better hook for readers. There were some grammar issues and places where names and titles could be capitalized, but these are easy fixes.

I liked much of the description. We get a sense of people and what the main character sees and experiences.

Once there are more chapters out, this has the potential to be an enjoyable read.

Needs some fleshing

There's a good plot here that could be played with a little. I agree with others who have said that there is a whole host of repetition, grammar and punctuation need to be worked on, and that only describing someone as "Mr. Tual" or "The man with the German accent" can make your reader's eyes cross a little.

For grammar, there were misspelled or misplaced words, but the biggest one for me is that every time you write in quotes, you use a comma inside the quotes before identifying the speaker, unless it's a question.

Example. "I was asking how you were," Mandy said.
VS.
"How are you?" Mandy asked.
When a quote is followed by he/she/it, they do not need to be capitalized.

Fleshing out your descriptions, working on grammar/punctuation, and learning when and where to reveal your bad guys and/or plot twists will improve this dramatically.

I wish you luck on this and other ventures.

-Author of Hollow's Charge

Interesting Concept

The descriptions of the characters and places were OK in that you could tell what was being talked about, and each character had their own personality to set them apart. I had a feeling before the explanation at the end that this was based off and/or inspired by anime.

The plot was sort of all over the place. The beginning was a little slow and because of the long chapters, I felt like a needed a break between each of them before I continued. If these were shortened, I believe it would help ease the flow for the readers and make them want to go to the next chapter right away.

Another thing was I wasn't sure this could even be considered a fantasy until the arrival of the faeries. Without them, this could be considered an action/sci fi book with all its bionic and warring content.

The love triangle was an interesting touch, but switching back and forth between those struggles and the random missions the main character was sent on could get confusing and a little description heavy.

There were some missing words I found here and there, and greater emphasis could be placed on grammar and punctuation, however these are easy fixes.

All in all, it wasn't a bad start. I couldn't give it higher than three stars because of the confusion I felt and the long chapters. I do hope this feedback helps in the future and I wish the best for the author!

Great Ride!

This was a great book from beginning to end. So many characters can be overwhelming at first, but stick with it and you're able to work out who's who. The author did well with drip-feeding info and surprising me with twists I didn't guess. The ending was fulfilling and didn't leave anything hanging.

The description and detail was enthralling in this, and there was no doubt as to who or what was being discussed.

I highly recommend this book to anyone wanting a thriller that will leave you guessing till the very end.

Enjoyable read

I liked the way emotions were captured in this book. There were vivid descriptions of everything, especially the dreams. The ending brought a nice twist that nevertheless left it bittersweet.

There were some issues with misspellings and grammar, but these did not seem to distract much from the book. The writing style was clear, and the dialogue believable.

Overall, I enjoyed this book and the interesting way it all turned out.

Great mystery!

This was very well done. I thought I had an inkling as to the culprit a few times, but there was always something that deterred me at the last minute. The ending was completely unexpected, which made it great and yet bittersweet at the same time.

I enjoyed it overall. There's some improvement needed with grammar and missing words, but these are easily fixed.

I would definitely recommend this to mystery lovers!

Engaing Concept

I like the idea behind this: It definitely has the potential to be a great story. I don't get too much of a first impression of the main character because it is so short right now, but the readers do get a small sense of who they're dealing with.

Grammar and punctuation needs work, but that is always something that can be fixed. It would be worthless without a good plot to accompany it, which is not something this author needs to worry about.

The conversational tone of this story is interesting. It's not necessarily my favorite, but it isn't really a big turn off for me either.

Overall, it was a nice start and has great potential to become more.

Good Plot

I enjoyed the plot of this. There were dynamic characters and it was funny and entertaining. The romance is taken slow and given some time to develop, and the personalities of the characters throughout this process is one of mutual respect, which I find refreshing in romance.

There are many grammatical and punctuation issues I noticed. It definitely would do the author some good to have an editor go over this and polish the product so nothing gets lost for people who tend to focus on any errors they may find.

Overall, it was a very interesting read and is a nice change from the everyday supernatural.